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GothicCherry
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since 2008-09-16
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0 posted 2009-02-04 10:25 PM



Many words reach my ears
telling unwritten tales of dread,
becoming the static of my fears.

You ran to me for everything.
At the finale I ran with fright,
turning from your love; fleeing.

Really it never would’ve worked
I’m scared to get too close
My heart so many times was jerked

Apologizing doesn’t cure heartbreak
Only the clock ticking may help.
But I am sorry for what you must take
Forgive me please for love so fake.


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freeand2sexy
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since 2008-09-12
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1 posted 2009-02-04 10:36 PM


"Forgive me please for love so fake."

Omg i felt the same way about 2 monthes ago with my ex, the last line sums it all up for me.

Really nice poem!!!

With God I am happy; sadness has no say in my life.

gdcod2player
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since 2008-07-26
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2 posted 2009-02-04 11:34 PM


Very  nice
i like the last line
it says so much
ill read again

Falling rain
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3 posted 2009-02-05 09:24 AM


Ahhh!!! Library, library, library!! hehehe. This poem I could connect very well. Great job!!

-Zach

When I see your smile, and I know it’s not for me, that’s when I’ll miss you.

Just.Another.Falling.Star
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since 2008-05-08
Posts 422
Canada
4 posted 2009-02-05 04:59 PM


i really loved this. it was beautifully written.
library

?ul!@nn@

these broken pieces of my heart are to shattered to be put back together again

Assassin_of_Verse
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since 2007-10-23
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that So Cal
5 posted 2009-02-12 02:37 AM


"Apologizing doesn't cure heartache"
*Sigh* if only this weren't true. Lol, great job.

There is power in the pen.

pandabear
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since 2009-03-08
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6 posted 2009-03-08 11:13 PM


really really good poem it reminds me of my ex in a way but anyways really good keep writing
RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08
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Australia
7 posted 2009-03-09 07:58 AM


GREAT JOB...

Amazingly written..

P.S... I saw your comment on another poem belonging to another member.. I LOVE YOUR HONESTY!

GothicCherry
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8 posted 2009-03-09 08:21 AM


Thanks Jess
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