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sammy9698
New Member

since 2010-10-16

Posts 5

0 posted 2010-10-16 04:52 PM

I'll stay with your forever and always.. those are the words he spoke... those are the words that i cry to every time i hear them... Those are the words that pop into my head when i think of him... Those are the words of an untrue meaning...
     Why did he say them if he didn't mean it... Why did he say it if it wasn't true...
  Does he kno the hurt he brought into my life.
Does he kno the scars that are more then skin deep.
   I hope he knows how true my love was for him.. i hope he see's the tears i cry... i hope he hears the sadness reaping my voice... i hope he feels the love that is withheld in my heart. I hope he knows that he is my one true love...

I hope he feels the pain i feel...

<3

madelyn
Member

since 2009-09-03

Posts 172
Purgatory

1 posted 2010-10-17 03:24 AM

This is a really good poem.
I enjoyed it throughly.
I like the presentation, which although it may not have been intended was messsy as this break-up sounds.

The poem was of an extremely high standard and I am hoping you write more like this in the future.

M

sammy9698
New Member

since 2010-10-16

Posts 5

2 posted 2010-10-17 03:17 PM

I actually did intend it to be messy not in normal format because of how messy the break up was. its like symbolism you know through syntax. But thank you i wrote that a year ago. and i just started writing again actually but thank you

<3

rebelrea
Junior Member

since 2010-10-22

Posts 20
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2010-10-24 04:02 PM

loved it, went through that a lot before and actually going through it again right now.. but great job! keep writing

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2010-11-07 03:43 PM

i really enjoyed this, we all go through disappointing things in life and hurt but you'll always be able to overcome it

Krysti

DrinaLove
Junior Member

since 2010-12-23

Posts 30
California

5 posted 2011-01-04 05:30 AM

Most of the time they won't feel ur pain...but u learn to move on and writing is the best way

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

6 posted 2011-01-04 06:55 AM

Wow. Ok, so you knew precisely what you wanted to do here and then did it. Doesn't get much better than that.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

Sara Mikael
Junior Member

since 2008-09-12

Posts 34

7 posted 2011-01-04 08:13 AM

enjoyed reading it

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