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Teen Poetry #9

Alone

mozart4321
Junior Member

since 2010-06-29

Posts 29

0 posted 2010-06-29 03:50 PM

Alone.
Alone in the dark.
  Alone in my room.
    Alone in my mind,
      my thoughts,
        my heart,
          my soul.
My conscience left
  alone.
To tear its beholder into
    pieces.
Pick him apart until there is nothing left but
      bone.
The shell gone.
His emotions boiling like a stormy sea.
Black
  To Red
    To Black again.
The reign of his demons a viscious cycle.
Piece by piece he demons take.
Leaving a cold
  exoskeleton.
    Devoid of feeling.
      Numb from the
        inside
          out.
Bloodshot eyes stare at
  white fists.
An aching heart screams in
    sorrow.

UNTAMEDelegance
Member

since 2009-05-30

Posts 222
Oregon

1 posted 2010-06-30 04:45 PM

I loved the feel that you were able to create. The language was really descriptive and painted a desolated picture that sent chills down my spine. Hauntingly good.

~UNTAMEDelegance

Misa: I can't imagine a world without Light!
L: Yes, that would be dark.

mozart4321
Junior Member

since 2010-06-29

Posts 29

2 posted 2010-07-01 02:30 PM

thank you again!!

i didnt know my poetry was that good. it makes me smile to read its praise.

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