Teen Poetry #9 |
depression |
Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
You're like a shadow on my thoughts You cling to my very heel Deranging every memory possessed Making my head reel You make it hard to breathe Make it hard to get up sometimes You keep me late at night Holding no reason to this rhyme My body aches yet I try to move Keep pushing right up and through I don't like feeling on an island My torturous sanctuary away from you You say you care but I second guess Can't you see what its doing to me? Just nod your head like you understand For you can't see what its like to be d e p r e s s e d |
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yamaha New Member
since 2010-04-01
Posts 3 |
Dude Awesome POem! |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Thank you Yamaha! (haha I think your username is the same name of my piano. xD) -Zach Wish I could find love.. But all I find these days are superficial fish in shallow waters. |
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nehematala Member
since 2009-05-21
Posts 129 |
wow I know his feeling but to see it in words is so different from feeling it. Nice write ~Michelle |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey Zach, Well written. I especially liked, “You make it hard to breathe Make it hard to get up sometimes”. Unfortunately I know the feeling. |
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Vulpine Junior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 20Minnesota |
Well written!! I liked it just like alot of your other poems!! great job |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Thank you guys for your comments! |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Awesome Buddy!!! |
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crosscountry83 Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 345 |
Zach, I think a poet's challenge is to put feelings into words, and you did that. Maybe because I can relate, but more likely because you have talent. Thanks for posting this, and I hope stuff works out, or goes away with time. -Rileigh |
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