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0 posted 2010-04-01 11:58 AM



You're like a shadow on my thoughts
You cling to my very heel
Deranging every memory possessed
Making my head reel

You make it hard to breathe
Make it hard to get up sometimes
You keep me late at night
Holding no reason to this rhyme

My body aches yet I try to move
Keep pushing right up and through
I don't like feeling on an island
My torturous sanctuary away from you

You say you care but I second guess
Can't you see what its doing to me?
Just nod your head like you understand
For you can't see what its like to be

d e p r e s s e d

© Copyright 2010 Zach Booker-Scott - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2010-04-01 09:00 PM


Dude Awesome POem!
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2 posted 2010-04-04 12:19 PM


Thank you Yamaha! (haha I think your username is the same name of my piano. xD)

-Zach

Wish I could find love.. But all I find these days are superficial fish in shallow waters.

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3 posted 2010-05-18 02:58 PM


wow I know his feeling but to see it in words is so different from feeling it.
Nice write

~Michelle

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4 posted 2010-05-23 06:30 PM


Hey Zach,

Well written. I especially liked, “You make it hard to breathe
Make it hard to get up sometimes”. Unfortunately I know the feeling.

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5 posted 2010-06-20 08:21 PM


Well written!! I liked it just like alot of your other poems!! great job
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6 posted 2010-06-21 11:57 AM


Thank you guys for your comments!
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7 posted 2010-06-21 12:25 PM


Awesome Buddy!!!
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8 posted 2010-07-01 02:10 AM


Zach, I think a poet's challenge is to put feelings into words, and you did that. Maybe because I can relate, but more likely because you have talent. Thanks for posting this, and I hope stuff works out, or goes away with time. -Rileigh
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