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Dark Poetry #5
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SlowlyFallAway
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since 2008-08-29
Posts 279
North Carolina
0 posted 2009-02-12 12:59 PM

A feeling couldn't last forever
Suicidal misbehavior
Cigarettes put out on car door leather
To remind you that the phase is over
Notes exchanged collecting dust
Flashing memories you forgot
Motionless on the sheets she's on
Her head lays where yours once was

January 22nd Thursday 2009
Emily Shives
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Suncleaver
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since 2009-01-18
Posts 481
Stafford England
1 posted 2009-02-15 05:51 AM

Powerful imagery Emily, a good write.

Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told.
GothicCherry
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since 2008-09-16
Posts 471
TN
2 posted 2009-02-15 06:09 PM

Oooh this is good
Def-init
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since 2008-12-03
Posts 186
Toronto, Canada
3 posted 2009-02-16 03:31 PM

I like this a lot.
Nice rhyme scheme.
Good vocab.
Great and deep meaning all over this piece.
Another solid read Slowly. Your gettin better girl!!
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