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looking strong (for now)
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looking strong (for now) |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
i would like some feedback for this poem I look strong from the outside I am fragile and weak from the inside Just like a beautiful intricate glass And slowly I am falling apart And slowly I’m being shattered There is something That’s pestering me Something that’s just Clutching me back Something that’s making Me fall apart Something that’s Making me fragile But I wonder What it is? I wonder Why am I feeling like this? Is it because someone betrayed me? Is it because I can’t move on? Why is it that I feel this way? It feels like someone put A weight on to my shoulders It seems its some kind Of burden that I can’t hold On to anymore everyday The weight keeps on increasing Making my shoulders drop What can I do to stop this? What can I do to take this burden away? What can I do? I want to stop feeling this way But I just can’t Because its difficult As if it seems like I have been traumatized And I have suppressed my feelings Because when I try to let it out My feelings won’t come out When I try to scream and yell From the inside and outside My voice won’t come out I don’t know why but it’s Me who’s holding myself back And this burden just keeps on Increasing And everyday I’m just falling Apart inside and outside But no one can tell Because I try my best To hide everything |
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LaGraceLa Member
since 2011-01-30
Posts 243Minnesota, USA |
Very nice poem, the one thing is that you do not need to write that you would like feedback. If people have it they will give it. But nice poem, good job. |
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maddorani Member
since 2007-11-18
Posts 423houston,tx |
you should check out my other poem called the desert plz read it hehe |
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