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prize
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since 2008-11-21
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0 posted 2009-01-23 12:28 PM


I revised this poem - love any feedback.
Pam


Emotions come quickly
Circling around grey matter,
Like racecars whipping on path
Revolving together, closely.
Emotions lose their path
Just as racecars often do,
Bombarding, fighting together
Slamming against the skull.
The brain hurts, just as the man
suffers in the car lost of control.
Feelings struggle, run wildly rampant,
Inside the fragile shell of thoughts-
Persisting fight continues as emotions collide.

Take away these emotions
With another scar of self harm.
Emotions pour down - lie heavy on heart,
Like the driver who hammers down on the
pedal, rubber pressed at full throttle,
Forcefully through winds of turbulence.
The feelings can be displaced and drift away-
With a slice, a slam, a burn-
Emotions are released, transformed into
Throbbing physical pain, pleasingly visible
As the brain has suddenly forgotten,
And the racecars stop for a moment,
Just for a moment in time, before emotions return.

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