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LaGraceLa
Member

since 2011-01-30

Posts 243
Minnesota, USA

0 posted 2011-02-15 04:48 PM

You think that because I am silent
          I am nice.
You think that because I am silent
          I am kind.
You think that because I am silent
          I am content.
                      But you're wrong.
          I am silent because
          I am hurt.
          I am silent because
          I am angry.
          I am silent because
          I am afraid.
You conclude that because I am silent
          I am happy.
          I am only happy when I can make it
              through the day without crying.
You deduce that because I am silent
          I am peaceful.
          I am only peaceful when I am completely
            burned up by emotions till all that is left
                                      is ash.
You expect that because I am silent
          I am okay.
          I'm not.

littlemonster
Junior Member

since 2010-05-06

Posts 39
UK

1 posted 2011-02-19 11:50 AM

Some times our silence can speak louder than any words. An insightful poem which struck a cord with me- such a shame it is easier to remain silent.

Joshkt
Junior Member

since 2011-02-09

Posts 12

2 posted 2011-02-21 05:02 PM

Title: Silence?
Feedback: I absolutely loved this, you have to be one of my favorite poets on this site, keep up the good work <3 - Josh

LaGraceLa
Member

since 2011-01-30

Posts 243
Minnesota, USA

3 posted 2011-02-21 09:19 PM

Thank you, I am flattered. It still takes my breath away every time someone compliments one of my poems. Thank you, it means so much to me to know that people actually enjoy my poems. Thank you so much, I still can not believe it.

FloraScars
Junior Member

since 2010-11-08

Posts 33
VA, USA

4 posted 2011-03-10 03:54 PM

i understand what you mean when someone thinks that of your silence.
it can often me misinterpreted for something else.
if i may suggest the title be My Silence?
i know simple, but its what popped into my head while reading your poem.

LaGraceLa
Member

since 2011-01-30

Posts 243
Minnesota, USA

5 posted 2011-03-10 08:35 PM

Thank you FloraScars, I actually really like that title. It fits. And thank you everyone for commenting, it means a lot to me to hear kind words. Thank you for the suggestions, I really do appreciate it.

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

6 posted 2011-03-23 12:17 PM

A Smoldering Silence. Silent Contradictions. The Flames of a Quiet Smile. The Burning Stillness. Never mind.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

7 posted 2011-03-23 03:16 AM

LaGraceLa, this is a wonderful poem, very memorable... another possible title might be The Unspoken Truth.

Just as an aside, have you ever heard the Moody Blues song The Balance? I think it is on the A Question of Balance album. The lyrics there are straightforward and meaningful as are your words here.

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