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Chavo.wavo Junior Member
since 2010-11-13
Posts 15 |
I feel the heart inside me ache. cold nostalgia chills my blood. Her memories still haunt my dreams. Her pain is still a part of me. She hurts me now with every breath. Her bites and scratches are still scarred. Her anger’s still focused on me. Her gorgeous eyes have turned black The hair i used to stroke is now like hissing snakes. Her skin would burn me if i touched. Her lips would pull my soul and destroy it. The girl i shared everything with. My heart My love My body My being Was now nothing more than a demon. And she was the one who hurt me. Sharing herself with another.. countless... others... [This message has been edited by Chavo.wavo (11-26-2010 01:14 PM).] |
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LaGraceLa Member
since 2011-01-30
Posts 243Minnesota, USA |
Sad but creativity written. You were able to describe her as you see her perfectly. Great job |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Magic. Potent. Very chilling and passionate. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!" |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
The lines tend to vary in length and that leads to a poem that looks a bit unruly. As to the girl. It sounds like she isn't that gorgeous or great anyway. The speaker should dump her back  |
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