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since 2010-11-08
Posts 33

0 posted 2010-11-08 06:51 PM

It was a mix of words
They swarm around me
And consume me

Dark little secrets
Laid out in my head
This night I dread

Your cold voice
Calls me in the night
I lose all sense of what is right

You draw me in
And all I want is more
I step forward to your door

I see your eyes
They kill me inside
Your touch takes me for a ride

An illusion it was
A piercing pain
Shoots through my veins

A murder
Caused by
Your lullaby

"Love is a dance. Some have it easy and others struggle."

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New Member
since 2010-11-17
Posts 5

1 posted 2010-11-17 03:58 PM

I loved this! I had the same feeling about someone close to me as well. Well done!
Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105
Watertown, NY
2 posted 2010-11-19 11:08 AM

I love the open-ness of this. Welcome to PIP!


"A heart that can't feel its broken- can't heal."

Junior Member
since 2010-11-22
Posts 19
Chicago Il
3 posted 2010-11-27 08:34 PM

thought provoking to say the least, thank you.
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
4 posted 2010-11-27 08:52 PM


You did not ask for critique, so I will not give any...

but this has promise!

Less is more...if you wish, email me, and link this poem.

In the meantime? Check your email for a
Very Special Welcome!

since 2008-05-16
Posts 136

5 posted 2010-12-02 01:18 AM

I used to have a hard time figuring out how to write dark without suicidal depictions or gory glory, but I really like the simplicity of this poem.

Well done.

Does she pray, or am I prey?  

Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372
6 posted 2010-12-08 11:47 PM

WOW now that I can relate to! GREAT way with words!!!


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