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Mr Naz
Junior Member

since 2009-10-22

Posts 29
London United Kingdom

0 posted 2009-10-22 12:37 PM

Regret On Terror

Many, many and more is the regret,
But of one my heart will not let go,
Nor my mind will never, ever forget;
When my hands attempted to hurt you so.

What was that psyche wearing a black coat;
A dark creation like a Mr Hyde,
An unreasoning animal, snared and caught
In an emotional trap, bereft of pride.

Was it really I that acted as such
In that demented unthinking guise.
On this I have pondered many an hour so much,
And of that dreaded terror in your eyes.

And of these insane, reprehensible acts
I punish myself relentlessly,
Daily, for dishonouring our loves tracts.
No! this damning guilt will not let me be.

Yet I do not crave your absolution,
In this there would be no honour nor glory.
But like a sinner I pray for redemption â€“
My greatest apologises â€“ Iâ€™m truly, truly sorry

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2009-10-22 03:34 PM

Firstly, welcome to Passions and I really hope you will love the site as much as a lot of long time residents do.

I really enjoyed this poem, for the simple reason that you showed the remorse in acts not acceptable in today's society.

It is hard to write dark that goes just up to the border of our guidelines, and you succeeded in doing this very well.  Where there is harm to anyone showing no remorse, those poems are scrutinized then mostly removed.

Again, welcome aboard, and I look forward to reading more of your work.

Mr Naz
Junior Member

since 2009-10-22

Posts 29
London United Kingdom

2 posted 2009-10-22 04:05 PM

thanks for your comments. This piece depicts the regret I had - have at acting in such a way, it was at the end of an 18 year relationship which broke my heart and took me to the edge!!!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2009-10-23 06:54 AM

"Was it really I that acted as such
In that demented unthinking guise.
On this I have pondered many an hour so much,
And of that dreaded terror in your eyes.

And of these insane, reprehensible acts
I punish myself relentlessly,
Daily, for dishonouring our loves tracts.
No! this damning guilt will not let me be."

I could feel the remorse in your words.
M

Mr Naz
Junior Member

since 2009-10-22

Posts 29
London United Kingdom

4 posted 2009-10-23 12:59 PM

Thanks nakedthoughts glad you recognised what i was expressing

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