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Astrophial New Member
since 2009-08-10
Posts 6 |
What is the difference, between the night and the day? And who would have it any other way? One without the other is nothing all. But the moon is only as bright, as the sun that lights up all. And the stars only shine, when the sky is black. So what is the reason, they rely on each other? And why would anyone, Choose one instead of the other? Hmm. My muse seems to have crawled into a hole to die. I would love feedback, don't be afraid to be harsh. |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
For me, the substance in the words is as important as the flair for presenting them. This had enough of both. I don't think your muse is quite dead. ·´~`·»Brett«·´~`· |
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Astrophial New Member
since 2009-08-10
Posts 6 |
Thanks. I was kinda trying to rhyme it, but I just made it into a sort-of free-form, with some rhyming. Which is slightly weird to read. |
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Def-init Member
since 2008-12-03
Posts 186Toronto, Canada |
Not to bad at all. Welcome to PiP I enjoyed the overall substance you added into this piece. - If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell - |
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