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Dark Poetry #5

Fixing This Flaw

ShadowOfLies
Junior Member

since 2009-06-21

Posts 13

0 posted 2009-08-09 08:02 AM

Beneath this lie
Perceived as me
There exists a wisp
A living substance
Which needs to die
To free me
From this mortal cry
To be the strength
To be the pillar
For those in deepest terror
They should not see
This crack within
For I am the one
To answer their plea
Tonight will strike
With fear and shame
As I rid my heart
Of this endless game
To murder is to cure
To become whole once more
And reclaim my place
As prince of the unpure...

Brian

Def-init
Member

since 2008-12-03

Posts 186
Toronto, Canada

1 posted 2009-08-09 03:56 PM

Yo, I liked this.
The flow was off a bit at times.
But that only helps it (IMHO)
As I read it I like the wordplay used as well.
only wish it was longer.

- If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell -

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