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Inspired-8
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since 2008-04-14
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Pluto

0 posted 2008-12-28 02:13 AM



Ever cringing
Thoughts bleed fear
Panic fringing
Dark's despair

Consecrating
Tears to blind
Explicating
A tormented mind

Forever chronic
Symptoms instill
Depressive catatonic
Exacting will

Inspired-8

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Anniepimm
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since 2008-12-26
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1 posted 2008-12-28 07:41 AM



Excellently written
You can almost feel the dark  despair
In the provocative write,
Well penned

Annie

prize
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since 2008-11-21
Posts 116

2 posted 2008-12-29 04:09 PM


This is a terrific poem.

I love the way it flows and the words you use...reading it out loud is similar to hearing music and the imagery is incredible.

Very well done.  Thanks for sharing and I hope to read more.

P

GothicCherry
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since 2008-09-16
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TN
3 posted 2009-01-26 06:03 PM


I like the words you used.
It really shows the darkness through very well, enjoyed. -GC

Desirer4New
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since 2008-04-23
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4 posted 2009-02-09 06:24 PM


flows very nicely...enjoyed
Def-init
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since 2008-12-03
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5 posted 2009-02-16 03:33 PM


Hmm, I don't know what to make of this poem.
I get the feeling of a dark presence in this poem. Words placed perfectly for such a short poem. Was a good read for sure thou.

Inspired-8
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Pluto
6 posted 2009-02-19 02:18 PM


thank you all for reading and commenting: )

peace
vic

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