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pandabear Junior Member
since 2009-03-08
Posts 36 |
i wish i could tell them why I'm so quite, upset, and even not eating but I cant Instead im holding it inside of me to the point to were im hurtin myself with a knive again or even thinking about suicid over and over like how i used to i should just tell them whats wrong its easy everyone does it Wait no! i cant its to hard and im to scared of the outcome i wish there was someone to talk to but theres not a soul in the world who can help me ill just be judged again and again like always [This message has been edited by pandabear (04-03-2009 09:37 AM).] |
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Def-init Member
since 2008-12-03
Posts 186Toronto, Canada |
I like this. Deep and dark passion here. Not to complicated, but a good read. Keep them coming Panda. - If I cant bend Heaven, I shall move Hell - |
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pandabear Junior Member
since 2009-03-08
Posts 36 |
thanax Def-init |
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Ethernaut Junior Member
since 2009-04-07
Posts 31NT, Australia |
Read what others have written and perhaps you'll find a semblance of understanding. I have found the in the strangest places, there are people willing to help, willing to listen without judgment. I got so far behind my wall that the only thing that held me back was the pain my passing would cause to those around me. I wrote a poem of mine "Legarthy Awaits" while I was experiencing the worst breakdown I've had. I swore to myself that if help was offered, I wouldn't refuse it. Yet if it hadn't been offered, I would be still in that position, and perhaps in yours. As I once was. Since then, I'm on medication and have a good GP and Psychologist. I'm alive again. One thing I have found is that it is easier to talk to someone who is a complete stranger to you. I don't know your situation, but I am always willing to listen, or read as the case may be. Stay strong As for the poem. I found it really moving. I do have a couple of qualms. The English language does change from time to time, but it's still best not to neglect spelling and punctuation. I like to read poetry out loud and without these clues, I can't quite get the rhythm or feel what you felt while writing it. Then again, the lack of, for instance, commas, in certain places can change the flow entirely. Bold and italic are great for emphasizing a certain point. But overall, a good read. Nice going Beauty can be found in all places, even within the darkness of the soul. |
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rad802 Member
since 2008-04-19
Posts 279KY U.S.A. |
I like this. Good work. Please visit my wifes forum. It would mean a lot to her. Thanks http://bride.hyperboards.com/index.php Rick Delmonico |
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Teri Junior Member
since 2009-06-15
Posts 13Adelaide, Australia |
this reflects how i feel atm. my thoughts almost exactly. but uve put it into words and created a poem worth reading - a great poem |
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