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peter griffin Member
since 2008-03-06
Posts 56 |
No emotion, heart is frozen, All alone, a separate ocean, Beloved notions, complex quotients, Simple thoughts about devotion, Parables of distant romance, Fighters fight and love is stolen, All is lost in the commotion, Life is changed within a moment. Breath is breathed and wind is whispered, Secrets kept between two sisters, Ancient battles without winners, All condemned to hell as sinners, Scathing glances, quiet dinners, Happiness just never lingers, Darkness triumphs, light surrenders, Life will savage all contenders. Speak to no one, stones are silent, Projected image, complex, quiet, Violent thoughts are brewed in private, None can know, it's just not time yet, Emotions trimmed, a feelings diet, Necessary for survival, Memories of times gone by and, Most are bad, can't figure why yet, No sense dwelling, not worth crying, Past is past and present's thriving. Lonely days and lonley miles, Lonely nights, a lonely child, Lonely years of lonely smiles, All alone, no one for miles, Lonley days and lonely nights, Lonely games and lonely fights, Lonely school and lonely play, All alone all lonely day, All alone in every way, Alone, alone, alone I stay. |
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JenniferMaxwell
since 2006-09-14
Posts 2423 |
A stream of consciousness sort of poem - evocative, poignant and well written!. |
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peter griffin Member
since 2008-03-06
Posts 56 |
Thank you. |
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kindredspirit Member
since 2009-05-19
Posts 156 |
very smoothly written, and you seem to tell multiple stories within one. good style. |
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lynne123 New Member
since 2009-05-25
Posts 2 |
Hi! This poem moves me so much that I can feel the gripping sadness that lies deep down in the subject's heart. You really captured deep-down sadness. Good work! I really like it. |
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peter griffin Member
since 2008-03-06
Posts 56 |
Thank you. |
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Teri Junior Member
since 2009-06-15
Posts 13Adelaide, Australia |
this is really great, very moving but it could do with a title... thanx 4 da great read |
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