Open Poetry #43 |
Steps (please click on the link) |
amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
“Steps are all you need To find your way there To love and to passion And to someone who cares. There are rules, however. You must take each one Otherwise you start over. Think of it as fun.” He said in a whisper “Now close your eyes.” She did as he said, Hearing a smile in a sigh. Excited and thrilled She waited for her time. “This is the payment For all of your crimes…” She opened her eyes. And soon began to cry. http://i554.photobucket.com/albums/jj406/katfer456/ryaninireland069.jpg |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Interesting poem has a sense of anticipation about it but in the end a sense of disappointment, Excellently written... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Nice write it evokes images to fill in the story's meaning. Is that those rocks over off the coast of Scotland? Take care Eric IF YOU HAVE TO JUDGE SOMEONE DO IT ON THE SIDE OF MERCY AND LET TIME SEASON THE RESULTS. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms muse..you always make me think of early morning laughter when you write..enjoyed it ms |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
It's the causeway in Ireland. Thank you both for your comments. I enjoy both of your works temendously. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
very beautiful idea, enjoyed the steps with your poem. yann |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
It's an intriguing write and brings smiles, as it seems hopeless. Great picture too! Well done! Love, Margherita |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
amusemi - all those crazy steps, no wonder she cried, nice write... BC |
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sarah 45 Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 54 |
nice 1, liked those steps that turned out 2 be cruel ones, well writen... T.C |
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