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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2008-12-19 02:00 AM


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KKPBtZ0Zzok


* * *


please hold me

yes, just touch my face

and if your finger's trembling?

It feels like butterflies and lace.

I won't mind at all.

Touch your lipsink teasing mine

bite like this

say "wow"

and now

nuzzle-suckling aching wet

endowed

with rough tongue's dancing trace

of there it is and there it ain't

pleasing me to tilt my head

with your hand

held

just beneath...

Make love to me

I'm whispering:

love to me

like this: embrace;

wishing we were catholic

holy water sprinkling

every hour, chiming in

as the tall belltower

sings:

love was made to me

(a gong)

a bell

is ringing, singing dawn...

Love was made to me -

I'm free

dancing in the twinkling

beneath the moon so prettily

making patterns that I trace

where your fingers once

were tunes

making me a music box

spindled,

Debussy:

the grace

Clair de Lune...upon my place

so silent

secret

unto me.


as I remember

Love.

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1 posted 2008-12-19 02:41 AM


Now you did it - that was Willow's favorite dance tune but it was good cry anyway I guess.  Lovely K, really very lovely.
nourzihane
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2 posted 2008-12-19 05:57 AM


Dear serenety

God bless your words & your soul

my best wishes

Nourzihane

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
3 posted 2008-12-19 07:12 AM


now right there is romance
steavenr
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4 posted 2008-12-19 08:23 AM


a beautiful read, a beautiful tune, a series o sighs to go with creatively beautiful words like these:

"It feels like butterflies and lace."

...to watch them appear in a clip & paste even brings another sigh...now that's good writing...and who doesn't love Debussy...sigh...

latearrival
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5 posted 2008-12-19 07:32 PM


Perfect match! You are captivating! "Late"
Robert E. Jordan
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6 posted 2008-12-19 09:46 PM


Yo dear Serenity blaze,

Thanks for the lovely musical link and poem.  Being good Catholic boys, Bones and I love classical and semi-classical music.  We get a lot of it at Mass.

Love Bobby

Midnitesun
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7 posted 2008-12-19 10:19 PM


God, I love that Debussy music!
Now I'll be humming it in my sleep tonight.
What a gorgeous write, lady Serenity!

secondhanddreampoet
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8 posted 2008-12-19 10:23 PM


what a grand-fine ending...

"so silent

secret

unto me.


as I remember

Love."

...to an exceptional piece of 'musical' poetry [with such wonderful
imagery (I am especially fond of: "like butterflies and lace")]

long-sustained applause!!

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
9 posted 2008-12-19 11:27 PM


K,

Debussy, “Claire De Lune” is one of my favorites
as is, “Prelude to Afternoon of a Faun”

try
“Consolation” and “Lieberstraum” by Liszt
and “Traumerai” by Schuman

I think you will like them also

h


2islander2
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10 posted 2008-12-21 05:28 AM


Thanks serenity for this very musical and delicate work, I could hear the music and was amazed by your words and rythm of your poem.

yann

serenity blaze
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11 posted 2008-12-21 06:18 AM


This music stirs me to tears.

It's truly like the sound of flowers blooming...

Oh I wish I could dance...

spinnnnnnnnnnnnnnn...oh to have such grace!

My humble love to all.

Callista
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12 posted 2008-12-21 11:38 PM


Verrry, verrry, lovely and delicate. ("endowed with rough tongue's dancing trace of there it is and there it ain't" and the Clair de Lune part--mighty fine!)

"The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ,
Moves on: nor all thy Piety nor Wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line.."

serenity blaze
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13 posted 2008-12-21 11:59 PM


smiling at your signature Calis...

thank you.

Susan Caldwell
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14 posted 2008-12-22 12:04 PM


Gave me chills..

the good kind.

Love you much...

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

gilead
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15 posted 2008-12-22 01:32 PM


With deep admiration for one who has the gift to assemble words so tenderly, words that throb with the heartbeat of love.

congratulations on a fine work of art ---

art

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16 posted 2008-12-23 03:16 PM


Grace? *S* Lady... don't you realize how your words dance, whether your feet follow or not? *S*

I couldn't even respond at first... you literally melted me. Bravo!

latearrival
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17 posted 2010-04-24 03:28 PM


This is one of my all time favorites.The audio does not work anymore but it does bring you to the page and I  was able to chose another rendition. This is really beautiful and not to be missed. latearrival/jo
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