Open Poetry #43 |
spasms unbound |
steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
synapses of the mind like spasms unbound pain-ted in harshness spackled in darkness canvass portrays the yearnings of the soul bright flashes of light in cadences of coal spark-fires illuminate the space-black contained in cellars of thought-birth held in the mains of emerging doubts by mem'ries reminisced expressionless formations first formed war-cries unspoken in shouts of the deep wordless emotions from caverns that keep the unsaid in silence...the silent unsaid |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Steavenr, This is one of your better ones. Bobby |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
lived this one, Bobby...it is from a real-life experience...thank you kindly for reading and commenting |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
To me this screams; repressed memories. and I loved it. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Feeling this memory heartache. |
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Vestibular Bard Member
since 2008-12-11
Posts 284New York |
I really like the final line...my own synapses will be playing with that idea, sometime in the future. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Susan, I am so glad it spoke to you like this...what I love about poetry most is the readers' interpretations...thank you for being so kind in your remarks Midnite, while it does not deal with memories per se, I can surely see how it could. Truthfully, it is something far more dark and sinister (at least, in my eyes, it is). It is my feeble attempt to describe a physical seizure condition I battle from time to time, sometimes not very successfully...thanks for reading and reviewing V B, in its context, that line may very well be the cruxt of the whole matter--thank you for noticing and commenting |
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