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Grand Canyon |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
I boarded the helicopter, the Grand Canyon fired the tongue as to gulp down all of us who passed in the cloudless sky, I saw the animal crawling in muddy waters, winding in the red rocks, threatening the stinging sun, abandoning finally its lazy hunting, leaving me insect quartered by the noise of rotors return in the heliport…. My thoughts amazed the river in floods…. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Yann, This is fine writing. The Grand Canyon is an amazing sight. I was taken there when I was about seven for a visit. I'll never forget it. Bobby |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I loved this, Yann. I have never been to America except through your eyes, and those of others. Thank you. I hope the animal in the muddy waters got some supper with as little pain and suffering to the prey as possible. - Owl |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Yo Bobby, 7 years old is a time to remember specially if you did things like that...I had the chance to visit it in july with sunny weather with two friends...It was great and unforgettable but we did just a little part and didn't go down to the river (spend one evening and two days)..I was the only one to choose the helicopter which is impressive and what I remember the most is the awful noise (even with ears masks) . Thank you for your kind comment. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Owl, thank you for the kind comment....The river in grand canyon (colorado) do like to a theratening snake and the visit can be dangerous (very long walks in the sun)...That is the reason I introduce danger in the poem....West america is one of the most fabulous place to visit (every day has something extraordinary to discover) and spend one or two months here is quite amazing...I appreciate very much your comment. yann |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
2islander2 - I'm sure the Canyon was most beautiful from the air. Vivid write... BC |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
It really depends of the lights, too sunny is no good, at dawn or at evening are the best moments to my eyes...Thank you for the appreciated comment. yann [This message has been edited by 2islander2 (12-15-2008 10:42 AM).] |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thanks for the added details, Yann. It made the reading experience even more interesting. - Owl |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful...I think I visited the Grand Canyon as a child with my parents...I know that I visited the Painted Desert, I remember running down and falling and tumbling...James |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
thought for sure I had already commented on this...well, simply making up for what should have already been...the kind of write where you let the reader feel like we were there with you--where we feel for sure you were there 'cause we can tell it in your very descriptive words...well done, very well done |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
yann, This is really good. I have always wanted to go there. Alison |
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