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Miles Between |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I hear his voice in ev'ry drop of laughter And feel his presence long since gone My lips purse to greet the moment Only to realize I've been there many times before The smiles, the miles between our hearts, our minds, our souls We share like a morning cup of coffee In our fav'rite shop of chocolate cake doughnuts Reading separate sections of the same morning's news Wiping our mouths with cheap paper napkins Tasting the flakes as if to savor each one's fall From the state of yeast-filled glaze Upon our finger-tips to our lips We touch our tongues and smile to enjoy The ritual of pastries shared by a father and his boy |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Awesome! Loved it... I also love doughnuts... Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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shortsleeves Member
since 2008-10-19
Posts 125Franklin Tennessee |
Great work! Thank you. hal |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
steavenr - what a terrific ending, and I love those doughnuts also, yummmmyyyy... BC |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Steavenr, This poem has a nice idea. I once O.D.ed on doughnuts. I won't do it again. Bobby |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
viking, thank you for liking it...and, really, who doesn't like doughnuts? hal, appreciate you reading and commenting...thanks Bill, I changed the ending...glad you liked this one...and the chocolate covered glazed ones are definitely my favorites...yummm Bobby, I have two grandsons (Jack & Bobby). They are coming in from Europe this Christmas and we have already planned our doughnut orgy (home-made, hand-dipped, in home-made chocolate frosting--we plan to follow your lead and OD on them) thanks for commenting |
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FNG Member
since 2006-02-07
Posts 477 |
reminds me of my breakfasts with my mum...very heartfelt  thanks for reliving it here for me. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
It is those happy moments that have the tears coursing down my face, Steaven. I am sad that your father is long since gone, but happy that you have such wonderful memories. - Owl |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
If all father/son relationships were like this, the world would be a much better place!  Steaven, you wrote of your's and your father's closeness with warmth ~ and reverence... You were a fortunate son ~ and he a fortunate father. Love & Eternal Light, Linda  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
It's always the simple things that mean the most and you have recounted this one with warmth and love. Well done! Enjoyed! Helen |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I remember some times like these but mine weren't doughnuts. We gorged on country apple pie with cheese melted over it along with the coffee. Thanks for taking me back to wonderful memories. Wonderful write to showcase the meaningful parts of life. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
FNG, food, family, fun, and fellowship--always have tried to live by that credo...glad you could with your mum Owl, I lost my father long before he passed...life and circumstances dictated distance between us...he is probably closer now than in the past...all because of wonderful memories we shared when we could Linda, you were right on every count, and I appreciate your sensitive and kind remarks...thank you Helen, how right you are and how privileged you make me feel...thank you & so glad you enjoyed Mark, I firmly believe it is not necessarily the certain food, it is the certainty with which you remember the sharing. You, too, were fortunate in your wonderful memories. Thank you for your kind comments. Vandana, so glad you enjoyed...thank you for reading and then, thanks again for commenting. I appreciate it. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Precious times, perfect treasures. As much a treat to read, as the sweet taste of glaze...or knowing it has become a tradition to savor. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
a tasty treat for all |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Steaven, This is beautiful. You caught me and kept me. Alison |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
TD, Precious times become perfect treasures with passing memories...thank you for your beautiful comments inked, Tasty? Indeed! So happy you enjoyed Alison, Thanks So glad...it is an honor to do both |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed this write! ARCTIC WIND |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
better than a highway amigo..enjoyed it |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
How absolutely charming and profound, dear Steaven! Such beautiful memories of closeness. I experienced this like a movie and felt the emotion flooding me. Memories such as these make the precious bundle of tangible treasures we always carry with us. Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Artic Wind, thank you for reading and commenting...so glad you enjoyed it Dark Stranger, "better than a highway"...I like that...thank you very much...I appreciate it Margherita, your kind comments were especially meaningful...'like a movie'--what a standard to strive for...glad it touched you like it did (and you didn't even fast forward) |
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snoman New Member
since 2008-12-03
Posts 7 |
Nice. I understand the being there before. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
snoman, glad you did...knew you would & welcome to the pages of PiP |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This warms the heart and leaves a smile... Excellent! *S* |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
suthern, so honored that it warmed your heart and touched you as it did...thank you |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Memories of our fathers. So precious. I remember long walks to grandfather's house. My short legs skipping to keep up with my father's long strides. I was so happy and proud as I grew enough to be able to keep pace. I still carry his long stride and purposful walk. Thank you for your share."late" |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
late, thank you for responding with memories of your father...nothing (imho) can touch our hearts more than sharing memories of our fathers (and our mothers, for that matter)...thank you for your kind comments |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this is so wonderful. I sure miss my Daddy. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
SEA, just recently my youngest daughter discovered that her older (and very proper) sister called me Daddy. I just love to hear someone use that special term of endearment...thank you for your nice comment |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
My tounge loves doughnuts, my belly wants two, My wife thinks they are fattening, My butt does too!! I know the story is not about doughnuts, but I couldn't resist. Lovely sentiment on the rest of the poem WT. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
WT, that is hilarious...I have a new favorite verse I can sing on Saturday mornings...still laughing (and will be for quite a while)...thank you so much |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
What great memories to have Steav and I'm sure your Dad made you the kind hearted man you are today. So much enjoyed. Lindsay |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
What great memories to have Steav and I'm sure your Dad made you the kind hearted man you are today. So much enjoyed. Lindsay |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Steveanr, this is very interesting, very pictural, almost cinematographic and deeply sensitive... great work yann |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Lindsay, your take on this is certainly generous and I, of course, thank you for your kind remarks and I appreciate them yann, wow, I am truly flattered by your comments...thank you for being thoughtful enough to read and leave such an insightful review |
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