Open Poetry #43 |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. The sun Rose to shine Through blue air On another day Of being free At night again Under all the stars There will be Rest at peace After good food And wine Music Verse Unapproved Happiness Safely away From harm Thank God There is no Dog in the house That I can come Through the door Of my own home To get out of the rain . [This message has been edited by Huan Yi (11-26-2008 02:40 PM).] |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
such a good write..."Unapproved Happiness"...such a cool phrase in a captivating creation...thoroughly enjoyed |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
this is quite good and expressive, I think the dog is an appropriate metaphor. thank you for the enjoyable read. yann |
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