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Susan Caldwell
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0 posted 2008-11-26 10:20 AM



Calling out
for you, for someone, for something
Reaching in the dark
The contrast against fears
Smothering further cries

and I learned

like a child
not to ask for what is never given

Dreaming in silent screams
swallowed, least useless sounds hurt
Walking, bent, unnoticed
Blending into pavement
Reaching for nothing, no one, anyone

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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suthern
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1 posted 2008-11-26 11:51 AM


This is so painful to read I can't help but think... how much more so to live?

Well done!

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2 posted 2008-11-26 12:13 PM


Such deafening desperation...
You portray it painfully well.

~alyssa

Hupomeno.

inkedgoddess
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3 posted 2008-11-26 12:33 PM


i understand
that frenzied feeling of reaching for something not there
well done......

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4 posted 2008-11-26 03:08 PM


perhaps I'm not reading this one deeply enough, for I am struck more by its quality than I am by its message...this is so good
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5 posted 2008-11-26 03:24 PM


If you are reaching then your arms must be open.

------------------------zip!

sneaking me in there.

Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2008-11-26 11:41 PM




thank you all so very much!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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7 posted 2008-11-27 01:36 PM


I had a sense of deja vu while reading your pleaful cries. No, it was deja vu ~ and your words were painfully accurate!

Very well-written!


Linda

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8 posted 2008-11-27 05:00 PM


Susan - you write of the pain well, and I'm touched by this one...

BC

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9 posted 2008-11-29 04:29 PM


Hoping you find reason to stand up straight and create your own blending.  You got noticed on this one.  Crafted and portrayed in great form as well as content.  
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10 posted 2008-12-02 02:35 AM


Susan,

This is filet-to-the bone hurt and it is good poetry laced with sad emotions.  Almost sounds like a drink, doesn't it.  Come on by and I'll mix you up a 'good poetry with sad emotion on the rocks' and we'll toast the pain away.

Alison

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11 posted 2008-12-02 10:13 AM


and still susieC will smile it well again...
Susan Caldwell
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12 posted 2008-12-03 03:23 PM




Thank you!  

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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