Open Poetry #43 |
Dolorous |
Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Calling out for you, for someone, for something Reaching in the dark The contrast against fears Smothering further cries and I learned like a child not to ask for what is never given Dreaming in silent screams swallowed, least useless sounds hurt Walking, bent, unnoticed Blending into pavement Reaching for nothing, no one, anyone "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is so painful to read I can't help but think... how much more so to live? Well done! |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Such deafening desperation... You portray it painfully well. ~alyssa Hupomeno. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i understand that frenzied feeling of reaching for something not there well done...... |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
perhaps I'm not reading this one deeply enough, for I am struck more by its quality than I am by its message...this is so good |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
If you are reaching then your arms must be open. ------------------------zip! sneaking me in there. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
thank you all so very much! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I had a sense of deja vu while reading your pleaful cries. No, it was deja vu ~ and your words were painfully accurate! Very well-written! Linda |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Susan - you write of the pain well, and I'm touched by this one... BC |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Hoping you find reason to stand up straight and create your own blending. You got noticed on this one. Crafted and portrayed in great form as well as content. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Susan, This is filet-to-the bone hurt and it is good poetry laced with sad emotions. Almost sounds like a drink, doesn't it. Come on by and I'll mix you up a 'good poetry with sad emotion on the rocks' and we'll toast the pain away. Alison |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
and still susieC will smile it well again... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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