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Oklahoma Rose
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since 2008-02-28

Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA

0 posted 2008-11-16 10:24 PM

You took a heart as hard as rock
You managed to cut right through
Turning it into nothing but mush
That is when I had fallen for you

Love was such a splendid thing
I had never felt such an emotion
As I had felt when I was with you
You had my complete devotion

With you, the world was so perfect
I never would have even thought
It would someday come to an end
Now, my heart is no longer that soft

There is no doubt in my mind that
This heart will always belong to you
Ever to this day, my heart hurts me
It seems it will always feel blue

Once in a while I feel a tear in my eye
Then, I feel so much anger toward you
For the pain you left me with inside
Because, I thought your love was true

I would always tell myself each time
Just hang on for a little bit longer
After all, tomorrow is another day
But, it never did get any better

2008

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

1 posted 2008-11-16 11:47 PM

there is a deep melancholy in this that seems to end in resolve --enjoyed the journey

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2008-11-17 03:27 AM

a very sad write my sweet Sue..good that you could express your hurt though.. sending some hugs your way ... love RDB xxx

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2008-11-17 05:36 AM

Dear Sue, love that ends always hurts and every now and then, like you say, a tear is shed. But life goes on and your heart is able to love again, don't doubt.

Beautifully melancholic.

Love,
Margherita

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2008-11-17 07:15 PM

Fine writing...James

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

5 posted 2008-11-17 11:53 PM

Oklahoma Rose - words of torment within brought out in this write. Wishing you the best and that tomorrow will bring a softer heart...

BC

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2008-11-19 08:08 PM

Time truly can heal a broken heart. ~ It has mine. I subscribe to the notion that "It is better to have loved and lost, than to never have loved at all."

~ and it would appear that you loved and had been loved, deeply.

Very expressive write.

Sending a warm, comforting hug,
Linda

Oklahoma Rose
Senior Member

since 2008-02-28

Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA

7 posted 2008-11-19 08:47 PM

Thank you all for reading and replying. Once in a while, all of that darn pain comes back, again. Oh, how I hate that.

poddarku
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since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

8 posted 2008-11-19 10:18 PM

Love and languishment, pleasure and pain everything have blended in this poem.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

9 posted 2008-11-20 02:27 AM

It's amazing how someone we love can systematically destroy what is good until one has to leave and move on. Where does that love go? I think into poetry.

Alison

Oklahoma Rose
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since 2008-02-28

Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA

10 posted 2008-11-20 10:32 AM

poddarku, think you for reading and replying.

Alison, I use to ask myself that question. Being as determined as I am, it took me a long time, before I got to that point. I hung, as long as I could (longer that I should have). That is a pain I never want to feel again.

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