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Open Poetry #43

Dusk 'til Dawn

Freely_expressing
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since 2008-10-16

Posts 69
NSW, Australia

0 posted 2008-11-03 04:47 AM

I sit and watch the melting sun
Meek radiance on his face
Warmth floods the air, his eulogy
A vivid last embrace
Amber clouds and scarlet sky
This amorous bouquet
A lonesome star, twilights reply
Steals remnants of the day

Time suspends as day and dark
War in achromatic light
In No Mans Land, limits once stark
Blur boundaries of life
Artemis enters the fray
In her silver chariot
Shimmering arrows pierce the day
‘The sun’s Iscariot’

Orion ushers in the night
With Canis by his side
His blade a pure, celestial white
Heralds the charted tide
Another world of mystery
Spreads from the spectral gates
The wordless war of history;
Between each night and day

But victories are momentary
In this eternal war
The realm-less souls; rightly wary
The East’s ablaze once more
The sun returns with fiery wrath
His vengeance swiftly blinding
And he returns to play and laugh
Over my face now smiling

notes:
Artemis: Greek Goddess of the wilderness, the hunt, wild animals and fertility. But popularly associated with the moon or with Selene the Goddess of the moon

"sun's Iscariot:" the moon reflects the sun's light...betraying him in the 'war'

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

1 posted 2008-11-03 08:34 AM

'The sun’s Iscariot’ cool line...love your scholastic references (and you are so nice as to give some explanation)

welcome to PiP...if this is any indication of the quality of your work, we are in for a treat

Freely_expressing
Member

since 2008-10-16

Posts 69
NSW, Australia

2 posted 2008-11-03 07:46 PM

Thanks so much
Really appreciate you taking the time to comment

I'm glad the 'notes' were actually helpful and not insulting. The reason I put them in was because I myself had to use the internet to verify what I was writing was actually valid. I was actually debating whether to put in that line "the sun's Iscariot" as the connection seemed somewhat tenuous "hence the notes" but I'm glad you appreciated it.
Thanks again! - Ben

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