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Behind closed eyes
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Behind closed eyes |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands 
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Really don't want to close my eyes, because there are too many why's popping up, after moments dark, on which I have no sane remark. I see some words play in my head, that I not spoke, but should have said, but then, maybe, it was too late so I surrendered to my fate. I see a pile of work, not done and wonder where the time has gone, when innocence was all I knew, while strolling through wet morning's dew. I see a life of truth and lies, and lemonade and cherry pies, welcome kisses and sad goodbeyes. It is all there, behind closed eyes. Despite the fact that it is dark, I always see this little spark, which makes me grow in my believe, that what I sow, I shall retrieve. Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Titia Geertman, This quatrain has good end rhymes, I like the way it moves along. Love Bobby |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"Despite the fact that it is dark, I always see this little spark, which makes me grow in my believe, that what I sow, I shall retrieve." An inspiring read. Enjoyed Janette always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Inspiring Read indeed!  ARCTIC WIND |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
love the title, great truths expressed here, plus you describe a place where many find themselves...excellent write |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Ah, Dutchie, you always have the right touch. Amazing how much one can see with the eyes closed, isn't it? You describe it perfectly |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Titia darling heart, now this is superb, the flow is excellent, the rhyme is perfect. Within it all you’ve wrapped truth and beauty, I love it, as always your beauty shines darling heart. It is delicious to sip the sparkling drops of Dutch vintage, I so wish I had a thimbleful of your talent. Take care of you darling heart, and give my love to the sheep. As always Mushy x x x x x x x Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Hi Bobby, I'm learning, I'm learning to get my end rhymes right. Janette, glad you liked it. Arctic Wind, thanks. steavenr, welcome, haven't met you yet. Yes, when you close your eyes, you might find yourself. Ah Deer, so glad to see a glimpse of you, it's been too long my friend. And yes, memories of a wonderful time pop up too, when I close my eyes. Mushy, you're too kind, but I never can compete with you, my dear English friend. Wish we were in Tampa again, swimming in the pool and frying in the sun, while having lots of fun. Those were the good days. Memories that will last a lifetime. Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Very nicely penned Titia and yeah it could be me too "behind closed eyes"  Theresia |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Despite the fact that it is dark, I always see this little spark, which makes me grow in my believe, that what I sow, I shall retrieve. Very true words dear lady, it's like the adage that says, As you sow, so shall you reap. It is something that I always put into practice and it hardly ever lets me down. A much enjoyed poem, thank you. Lindsay |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Very touching and beautiful, Titia, but then I always enjoy your poetry because I sense that there is a very nice person behind it. Ida |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Hi there Titia. It's good to see you. As always, this is a wonderful poem. |
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