Open Poetry #43 |
Pantheress |
Pantheress Member
since 2008-11-02
Posts 215Queensland, Australia |
Pantheress He longs to hold her in his arms, to kiss and caress her, to feel her charms. His weakness he has shown, the seeds of violence sewn He feels so alone. He has left his mark upon her, She will bare it eternally, Just as she has left hers on him, A bleeding heart for all to see He pleads for her on bended knee. He cuts her deep, so long to heal. she holds his heart in a grip of steel. His eyes are dim the sparkle has waned. He feels so alone, he dies yet again. Though his body still moves, his heart beats no more. She walks into the night, and doesn’t look round, at all the destruction, and debris to be found. She says she going forward, by walking away, yet she has gone back, to start, yet again. He begs her to go forward, and face life together. She said she loved him, She said forever His words fall like rain drops on the forest floor. The panther has died, He can love no more. She dances and plays without a care for she can still love, and feel despair. She starts again, but doesn’t know why, She still goes forward, not looking back. Still going forward, on her well worn track. But if in time she turns around, In the panthers heart she can be found. Until then he has died in vain, in his lifeless eyes, can be seen the pain. For he loves her forever, the Pantheress |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
if he is violent, don't look back...don't go back...keep on truckin forward |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
I agree with Sea on this one!!!! ARCTIC WIND |
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Pantheress Member
since 2008-11-02
Posts 215Queensland, Australia |
To remember the woman I was -- with understanding. To strive for the woman I will become -- with anticipation. To accept the woman I am -- with pride. BY- Sensei Bobbi Snyder Say no to violence.. Because I'm worth it,smiles.. Thanks for the advice, although I have a panther tattoo down my hip, This may be the mark I see,chuckles.. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"She says she going forward, by walking away, yet she has gone back, to start, yet again." ~ Been there! Done that! You said it well! EA |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Quite the poem, Patheress. Ida |
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Pestillence Junior Member
since 2008-09-03
Posts 25England |
I liked this but it was an odd poem in that the rhyming was changeable, it's not a bad thing just something I haven't seen done for a while, good job |
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Pantheress Member
since 2008-11-02
Posts 215Queensland, Australia |
Thanks Artic Wind, SEA, Ida an Earth Angel the cycle of life we trek, The trick is to become aware of the circle we're walking.. And choose another path, So easy said,sigh.. On ward and upward.. And yeah, I kept truckin forward,smiles.. Thanks again.. Your GREAT!!smiles.. |
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Pantheress Member
since 2008-11-02
Posts 215Queensland, Australia |
Hi Pestillence thanks so much for your comment, I'm very new at this, when I write, I hear a melody in my head and the words sorta follow the tune.. Maybe I should be trying to write songs instead of poetry?smiles.. I'm not even sure if there's different types or category's for poems like in music we have pop, blues, jazz.. I was cruising the site and found the Passions in Prose.. Being female and Irish.. I went and had a sticky beak.. Thinking what is prose? Read heaps of different pieces, but still have no clue what its all about,smiles.. So any input is great input, feel free in sharing all comments,chuckles.. Thanks.. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I didn't look back, I didn't go back, I keep truckin forward and have been for a very long time now |
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americangothic Junior Member
since 2008-11-11
Posts 45 |
the sadness comes through very strongly....good piece |
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Sharon Rose Member
since 2008-11-03
Posts 51 |
No person can harm your soul, a place to run free and dream dreams. |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Dear Pantheress, you certainly did the right thing in walking away, for no relationship can move on to happy times when violence is involved. Good luck on the path ahead. Take care. Lindsay |
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Pantheress Member
since 2008-11-02
Posts 215Queensland, Australia |
So much violence in the world.. Balanced by wonderful giving people like you, LindsayP your right, there is no happy times when violence is involved, as it always lurks in the shadows of your memory and mind, over shadowing every event. americangothic I was very sad at the time, life sends us challenges to meet and learn from and move on, sharing what you've learned with others in their time of need. Sharon Rose an interesting concept,smiles.. I always thought he couldn't take the ground I walked on, as that belonged to me.. Sometimes our beliefs are just that beliefs, as other can set your soul free before its time for it to fly.. Thank you all so much for sharing your thoughts with me.. I love it,smiles.. |
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