Open Poetry #43 |
summer's play |
steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
summer solstice long since past sun-drenched dreams dissolve away furlowed mind-rays could not last while mem'ries warm begin to fray the cool of autumn dispels the heat and broad-leafed trees begin to fade while waterfowl their paths retreat and disappears the back yard shade a fire in the fireplace begins to burn a blanket warm its arms surround the windows close, the wind they spurn a true cool breeze cannot be found for summer has not gone away it has only come inside to play |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
There you go!! It's pretty what you wrote, but your ending says it all. |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"a blanket warm its arms surround" "They" are so clever, making the warmth of summer last. A playfully romantic piece, well written. Enjoyed! Janette always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Awww, you summed this up so beautifully. I love reading your poetry out loud. It's fine. A |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Blues, thank you for your niceness...and for liking the ending...thanks Janette, I guess I don't recognize it as romantic, but thank you none-the-less...always hard to see your work as others see it...but, then again, that's what I love about poetry...how it speaks to each reader differently Alison, you've been generous with your comments...thank you...I appreciate it |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
just wonderful Steaven... love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
And so the seasons change... Nice write. Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
I love seasonal poems!~ Just refreshing ARCTIC WIND |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
RDB, well, thank you...you are so kind Viking, yes, and time does go on, good thing we have changing seasons to break up the monotony of life...appreciate you reading and commenting Artic, thank you...you are always generous in your remarks |
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Callista Member
since 2008-10-05
Posts 63USA |
Very lovely. I am inside playing. You? "The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Autumn is my favorite time of year. We do carry the summer sunshine indoors... I believe it is the flame in the fireplace til spring. Enjoyed this very much. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Steavens I'm breathless with the ending...You are a gold digger...Thanks for the pepite(nugget) . yann |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Callista, thanks for stopping by, but trying to get out as much as possible now...the South is magnificent this time of year...the weather is actually perfect...but, anyway, glad you liked it TD, it is hard not to love the romance of fall...like your idea of the fireplace fire holding summer until spring...thank you for your nice thoughts yann, thank you...so glad you found a nugget...I just love your European flavoring on 'gold digger'. I only mean it in a good way (my son-in-law is European, with English as a second language and he always provides us with word gems...which serve well to flavor our conversations) thank you kindly... |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
This is absolutely beautiful! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Oklahoma, thank you so much for your gracious comments |
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