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steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

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0 posted 2008-10-30 12:05 PM

summer solstice long since past
sun-drenched dreams dissolve away
furlowed mind-rays could not last
while mem'ries warm begin to fray

the cool of autumn dispels the heat
and broad-leafed trees begin to fade
while waterfowl their paths retreat
and disappears the back yard shade

a fire in the fireplace begins to burn
a blanket warm its arms surround
the windows close, the wind they spurn
a true cool breeze cannot be found

for summer has not gone away
it has only come inside to play

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2008-10-30 12:09 PM

There you go!!
It's pretty what you wrote, but your ending says it all.

Janette

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since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

2 posted 2008-10-30 12:24 PM

"a blanket warm its arms surround"

"They" are so clever, making the warmth of summer last. A playfully romantic piece, well written.

Enjoyed!

Janette

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

3 posted 2008-11-01 07:38 PM

Awww, you summed this up so beautifully. I love reading your poetry out loud. It's fine.

A

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

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4 posted 2008-11-01 07:47 PM

Blues,
thank you for your niceness...and for liking the ending...thanks

Janette,
I guess I don't recognize it as romantic, but thank you none-the-less...always hard to see your work as others see it...but, then again, that's what I love about poetry...how it speaks to each reader differently

Alison,
you've been generous with your comments...thank you...I appreciate it

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

5 posted 2008-11-01 07:55 PM

just wonderful Steaven... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

6 posted 2008-11-01 09:05 PM

And so the seasons change... Nice write.

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

7 posted 2008-11-02 11:30 AM

I love seasonal poems!~ Just refreshing

ARCTIC WIND

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

8 posted 2008-11-02 03:20 PM

RDB,
well, thank you...you are so kind

Viking,
yes, and time does go on, good thing we have changing seasons to break up the monotony of life...appreciate you reading and commenting

Artic,
thank you...you are always generous in your remarks

Callista
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since 2008-10-05

Posts 63
USA

9 posted 2008-11-02 09:55 PM

Very lovely. I am inside playing. You?

"The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ,
Moves on: nor all thy Piety nor Wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line.."

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

10 posted 2008-11-02 09:59 PM

Autumn is my favorite time of year. We do carry the summer sunshine indoors... I believe it is the flame in the fireplace til spring.

Enjoyed this very much.

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

11 posted 2008-11-03 10:56 AM

Hi Steavens I'm breathless with the ending...You are a gold digger...Thanks for the pepite(nugget) .

yann

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

12 posted 2008-11-03 03:25 PM

Callista,
thanks for stopping by, but trying to get out as much as possible now...the South is magnificent this time of year...the weather is actually perfect...but, anyway, glad you liked it

TD,
it is hard not to love the romance of fall...like your idea of the fireplace fire holding summer until spring...thank you for your nice thoughts

yann,
thank you...so glad you found a nugget...I just love your European flavoring on 'gold digger'. I only mean it in a good way (my son-in-law is European, with English as a second language and he always provides us with word gems...which serve well to flavor our conversations) thank you kindly...

Oklahoma Rose
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since 2008-02-28

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Oklahoma USA

13 posted 2008-11-04 08:31 PM

This is absolutely beautiful!

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

14 posted 2008-11-04 09:19 PM

Oklahoma,
thank you so much for your gracious comments

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