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Bladecatcher
Junior Member

since 2008-11-25

Posts 15

0 posted 2008-11-26 12:29 PM

Falling
Watching the snow's descent
Riding gravity
In downward spirals
Towards ineviatable dissolution

The last syllable of recorded time
The last breath
Of our dialouge with the stars
Will be forgotten; not even changing
A contemptous breeze

In the end
Even stars are only just dust
Dressed up in fluorescence and romanticism
Riding gravity
Falling

Callista
Member

since 2008-10-05

Posts 63
USA

1 posted 2008-11-26 12:51 PM

Brings to mind the joy I feel listening to Petty's "freefalling." I really enjoyed the inevitable power of gravity in your words.

"The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ,
Moves on: nor all thy Piety nor Wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line.."

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

2 posted 2008-11-26 09:26 AM

Bladecatcher,

I have felt like that snowflake at times. Sometimes riding gravity is a thrill ride of its own creation.

I like this poem and I welcome you to PiP. Thank you for jumping in and sharing with us.

Happy Thanksgiving.

Alison

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2008-11-26 03:52 PM

Welcome to the site, Bladecatcher. I rather like this poem and hope to see more of your writing.
Ida

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

4 posted 2008-11-26 09:29 PM

cool write...btw, welcome to PiP, such an exquisite first offering..."Dressed up in fluorescence and romanticism"...superb phrasing...now this is worth the ink...forgive my elitism, but well done...extremely well done

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

5 posted 2008-11-27 01:43 PM

Hi, there! Welcome to the pip ship Lollypip!
(my affectionate name for this home away from home!)

Well, you certainly started your sojourn here with a bang! ~ or rather, a graceful descent onto these Blue Pages.