Open Poetry #43 |
The letter |
Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
I built in your soul a tower of love brick by brick each livelong day and in the night – well, night’s not come for still I build and still I toil to bridge the gap twixt heaven and earth. Yet you would have me break it down and drape the night o’er my design to forestall a journey upward, out, into that everlasting place of eternal grace. I harken unto words not said but, pardon me, I do believe a woman knows to not ere kneel before an unwise errant king. There was a once-upon-a-time when royalty wore jewels and crowns and ruled with deep and true insight but eons past those days of yore. I stand now a woman guarding more than just a tower - bricks, mortar, and how it shimmers, sparkles, glows, in my forever twilight time. ‘tis the sword of love that pierces night and halts descent of what’s not meant but even women can succumb when overpowered by no love. Today, tomorrow; who can say when towers crack and crumble and spread and scatter stumbling blocks on your road to heaven’s door? That’s all. No more my calling card of words to you unread! Helen / 25 October 2008 |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
though I must confess that you left me shaking my head at times (not in disapproval, but just not getting it)...my bad, I still enjoyed your write. I'll go back to read it again, but I found this jewel nestled amidst my haziness: "‘tis the sword of love that pierces night and halts descent of what’s not meant" |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Those times, when love is given and not understood or returned, can be the deepest agony. As a woman is an ocean, deeper than what can be seen on any surface. I understood this with my heart and soul. Sweet sister, you have written the secret ache of many an unrequited love. Well done~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed reading your Thoughts! ARCTIC WIND |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Honey, TD took the words right outta my mouth! Mind you, her reply is one heckuvvalot better than the one I could have written! I felt this ~ Heck, Helen, I feel all of your poems! Sometimes I may interpret them in a way that was not intended by you, but I still feel them with my own take on them! ~ But with this one, I believe I got its true meaning. Love to you! Linda |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
definitely beautiful! The only time we waste is the time we spend thinking we are alone. [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (10-28-2008 12:22 AM).] |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thanks everyone for your comments. I really do appreciate them and, Linda, it is my ardent wish that whatever (probably love) makes the words be written will just simply disappear. I believe it is something that must be overcome and so it will be because the thought of dying while still trying is just too much to contemplate. Helen |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Keep building dear Helen, Never give up, They say good things come to those who wait. Good luck and God bless. Love Lindsay |
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