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time prophet
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since 2003-07-30
Posts 371
In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees

0 posted 2008-10-09 05:57 AM


Hotel 101 well, maybe 23.
At least thats what I see
on the concrete pllar
amidst the rivulets of dust
in front of me.

0130 hours sucking
on a cancer stick.
On the grass verge
a solitary tree,
perhaps a dozen leaves
choking to death.
From the dust across the street
where the cat rumbles
and the mech' digger
loads the trucks.

Me not moving in the 32C
and 60% humidity
unable to sleep
in a city that never sleeps.

Soon, maybe,
I will get to go home again.


© Copyright 2008 Frank Bennett - All Rights Reserved
Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
1 posted 2008-10-09 10:32 AM


tp - Home is where the heart is!  In an ideal world everyone would be where their hearts are but the world isn't ideal, is it?  I wish that it was so but I've come to know that one nevertheless survives without a home.  I do, however, wish you a speedy return to your home.

Good to see you posting.  I'm not sure that the scene you painted would be to my liking but I can see it - and feel it.

Be safe.
Helen

2islander2
Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
2 posted 2008-10-09 11:03 AM


Hello TP, reading your poem I thought not only of an hostel, but my mind saw the atmosphere of an hospital room.....I like your poem.

regards

yann

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
3 posted 2008-10-09 11:21 AM


Not sure what I am reading Frank ( although I am always bad at interpretations

But I seem to agree with yann's

Hoping you are well~~

M

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
4 posted 2008-10-09 05:52 PM


Enjoyed reading...James
Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
5 posted 2008-10-09 07:55 PM


Hope you find your way home.
                     Ida

Chanson
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since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle
6 posted 2008-10-10 07:40 PM


With thoughtful poetic minimalism, you set the scene. Enjoyed, as always.
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