Open Poetry #43 |
Fall |
Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Fall My finger tips are cool A shiver down my spine -Winter creeps closer- The leaves change their colors Fall away from the tree And leave the tree naked In the dark the tree stands A gloomy figure in the dark A shadow of a star The tree will wait for spring For new leaves to sprout forth The seasons always change -Juju |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Lovely, Juju. Ida |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. good Juju John . |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
first, I love the format you used--3 line stanzas with resolution in the third lines, down to two, down to one--but format behind, the substance is excellent |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
You describe the cleansing for a new growth cycle quite well. I enjoyed the content and the form completely. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Thankyou every one!! -Juju |
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