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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
To picnic in Barstow we decided to go… We settle down, ready to lunch, a lousy car slow down until going motionless, the driver looks at me and shot a poisonous look, i still remember it now, (there was evil and inflexible determination), I’m scared to death and think instantaneously he’s gonna kill someone we can’t stay here for a second, he want some food or money and will take it whatever the price, I shout in a hurry to Dominique and Pierre-Yves: Jump in the car, They insinctively obey to the worry of my voice, we run away cowardly and check the car doesn’t follow, now we park at the police station, our hearts slow down, we will sleep in Mojave tonight…. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
That was a smart move, yann. Barstow? Yuck, I hate Barstow but then I just don't like the desert, period. Sorry you had such a bad experience but you definately did the right thing. Ida |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Not exactly on the list of places to go. It's one of those towns I pass through and get it over with.  anyway, hope you've had better days since then. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Ida, I really look at the death when I meet his gaze, I shout to my friends instantaneously to jump in tha car....Sometimes to be brave is to be dead, I'm glad you understand...I really think I saved some lives this day.... have a sweet day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Blue Serenade for your comment, I didn't know this place before, it was just a town between San Diego and Mojave on the road to Sequoia Park and we stopped for lunch on the road side... have a great day yann |
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oceanvu2 Senior Member
since 2007-02-24
Posts 1066Santa Monica, California, USA |
Hi Yann -- A great anecdote and example of a sensible action. I wonder, though, what makes it a poem rather that a short story? Best, Jimbeaux  |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Jim, I think there is always poetry in a story, and always a story in a poem. It is a story but there are two verses in the beginning and two verses in the ending which make alexandrin....I like to share stories too.... thank you for comment best wishes yann |
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