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the oceans's shroud |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
writing is the exercise that comes from leaning into life lifting sorrows, running memories swimming through the dregs of mere existence that comes from all who stay on parapets of emotion surrounded by the moats of simply living writing is the straining of the brain as it reclaims the thoughts and steals the heart-marks that are left by thinking once again riding on the waves of sincere reflections as a surfer would the ocean's shroud |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Wonderful expression in a very meaningful and beautiful write! Love, Margherita |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Steavenr~ You have lots of little gems of wisdom among your thoughts- 'parapets of emotion surrounded by the moats of simply living' I like this one~ *Huglets**Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I loved leaning into life... the feeling that you hold the oar, and make for land on gentle seas. The ocean's shroud...a calm that covers such power and emotion. Wow...you are writing wonderful stuff! |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Margherita, thanks for stopping by...that line was the impetus for the entire write...thanks for noticing Marge, I am glad you liked it...was a slow day here...drove me to write TD, Thank you for your graciouis comments...as I said, that was the though that gave birth to the write--you are too kind with your compliments |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Forgive me for my selfish honesty, Steaven, but may you have more slow days, if such a poem is the fruit. I woke to a soft-grey day with life-giving rain singing a soothing song and sparkling the greens and browns and greys of my indigenous forest garden - and then your poem joined in with its harmony and stimulated one of my favourite occupations, thinking, to move at a slower pace and more mellifluously - and so my stresses are easing. Thank you. - Owl |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
writing is the straining of the brain as it reclaims the thoughts and steals the heart-marks that are left by thinking once again oh my Steaven.. this is beautiful work here... love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Owl, Thank you for such a magnanimous comment. Plus, I learned a new word..." mellifluously" Now that's just too cool. I will be putting that one to good use! Thank you, thank you, thank you. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
RDB, Glad you liked it. I am overwhelmed by your graciousness. Thank you. |
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turbulent_melody Junior Member
since 2008-10-01
Posts 22Australia |
Gorgeous! The first stanza is so strong and uplifting and the remainder is so gentle and calming. A great read indeed.  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
It isn't every day that I agree with the gals, but this is one of them....Oceans work so well with poetic thoughts and composition. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
steavenr, After reading all the replies I'm not sure what else I can add except, "All of them over again"... BC |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
T_M, thank you kindly for your insightful observations Magnus, ah...the chick effect...how can it be...thanks for reading and commenting...appreciate it greatly BC, The magnificence of silence...certainly know that feeling--thanks much for taking the time to read and to comment |
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