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Whispers (redux) |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA 
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WHISPERS Whispers, just whispers, was it the wind, Sweet breezes blow by me, where has she been, Memories, fond memories, chased by the pain, Voices that whisper she’s gone, again. Lonely, just lonely, left all alone, Moonlit shadows, heart turns to stone, Sorrows, deep sorrows, burden the soul, Regret and despair, claim their toll. A moment, one moment, what did I hear? Was it the wind, whisper she’s near? Falling, I’m falling, into the past, She’ll not return forever, at last. Leaving, I’m leaving, time to move on, Misty last memories, I’m finally done. Breezes, sweet breezes, on new morning dew, The wind carries her whispers, "I’ll always love you". |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hello, there! ~ and welcome aboard the pip ship! I hope you enjoy sailing these pages of blue as much as I do! "Lonely, just lonely, left all alone," "Sorrows, deep sorrows, burden the soul," "A moment, one moment, what did I hear?" "Falling, I’m falling, into the past," "Leaving, I’m leaving, time to move on," "Breezes, sweet breezes, on new morning dew," ~ The entire poem is first-rate! I love the repetition and cadence of the above lines!!! Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug, Earth Angel  |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
Thanks ANGEL, that means a LOT to me. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Linda is right, first rate poem. Ida |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
very nicely done...love this line: "Leaving, I’m leaving, time to move on, Misty last memories, I’m finally done" |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
Thank you so much for your kind words. This poem was inspired by the love of my Father and Mother in law. She passed away just 2 months ago. 3 other poems of mine were inspired by them they were together 44 years. Please check "Eternal Devotion, Wilted on the vine and First there were Two. Let me know what you think. Theirs was an unbelievably true love. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome to Passions. Wonderful flow to this piece. Enjoyed the tempo, put music to the words that echo into dawn.  |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Leaving, I’m leaving, time to move on, Misty last memories, I’m finally done. Breezes, sweet breezes, on new morning dew, The wind carries her whispers, "I’ll always love you". A big welcome to PIP, you will love it here and I loved your poem. Lindsay |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I liked this very much. I swear losing a love is just like going through a death...the seven steps of grieving.. That is what your poem reminded me of. Welcome to pip...where everyone knows your name. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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