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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2008-09-14 11:26 AM

Fragile Pattern

charmaine china
pattern for eight
a dinner that is
always precisely late
forgive me Lord
again and again I sin
but look closely at my heart
it is worn thin
I feel like I stand
in judgment everyday
and mostly to myself
is it that I betray
forwards or backwards
which step is right
I gave in, I give in
story in constant rewrite
a woman’s voice
in a little girls cry
too much is unanswered
in questions of why
in a daily life a task
of justice to pursue
with the versions of the truth
all but one is untrue

"no darkness has ever been deep enough to extinguish my personal knowledge of love" Anne Rice

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2008-09-14 12:28 PM

This is such an intricate post, and so beautifully done.
Like fine china, the human spirit is a fragile and complex arrangement.

Lovely lovely~~

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2008-09-15 05:18 AM

quote:
a woman’s voice
in a little girls cry
too much is unanswered
in questions of why

How poignant, dear Helen.

Deeply emotional write.

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2008-09-15 08:08 AM

nice, very nice Helen. I can hear the same voices.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

WTBAKELAR

Senior Member

since 2008-09-09

Posts 1089
Utah, USA

4 posted 2008-09-15 12:31 PM

I see some of the women I know in that poem.
Very intimate

TheAnonDavid
Member

since 2008-08-28

Posts 237
UK

5 posted 2008-09-15 01:30 PM

This is a very interesting write with an even more interesting finale; often there are so many versions of the truth and the difficulty can often be in picking the right version.
An excellent observation on life.

Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Dylan Thomas

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

6 posted 2008-09-16 02:56 PM

Deeply powerful.

Eric

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

7 posted 2008-09-21 10:43 PM

fine work Helen

intriguing
so intriguing here:

"with the versions of the truth
all but one is untrue"

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