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The Flower
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The Flower |
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Jaki H Member
since 2008-01-19
Posts 232NJ, USA |
hi! first time posting in this forum... anyway, this poem is kind of Transcendentalist. Its my first attempt at freeverse so please be honest! if theres something wrong let me know so i dont make the same mistake in the future!!! thanks! xoxo, Jaki H ___________________________________________ The Flower He speaks of iced tea and childhood swing sets- He speaks of love, And of loss- He says perfection is a lost cause, And that even the damaged Are beautiful- -For he is imperfect too And he and I, we laugh We laugh at you, Who can ‘define’ beauty We laugh at you, Who tries to conform You, who knows books but will never know the whiplash of sea spray on your back And I laugh! At others who know only Science For I know only what I see! You are in bondage, And he and I, we laugh He spreads his petals wide in laughter Like wide and luscious lips, Silently laughing At those who are bonded To see only what they can explain- -Those who say flowers cannot speak- And he and I, we laugh And beg to differ! Must one have tongue to speak? He speaks of iced tea and childhood swing sets, And of the freedom you’ll never know- -For you are held in bondage.- |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Interesting concept and point of view. Don't worry about 'mistakes'.... feel the 'freedom' of 'free' verse. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This is interesting. I enjoyed it - I think you should keep playing with various styles. Another thing, if you post on this forum, you might get more feedback if you are stretching to other forms of poetry. Also, there are some pretty cool lessons in the Poetry Workshop. A |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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