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Shallow Grave |
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fitz1901 Junior Member
since 2008-04-19
Posts 16Michigan, USA |
This poem is still very much in progress and I would love your critique. and the title is still open so if you have any alternative suggestions ---------------------------------------------------- Definition of Chastity 1: the quality or state of being chaste: B. abstention from all sexual intercourse C: purity in conduct and intention D: restraint and simplicity in design or expression -------------------------------------------------- Shallow Grave I can imagine Laying down on the grass a blazing green The stars looking down in jealousy Your melting glare meets the surface of mine Our love sets fire to the skyline tonight relax, you knew it was going to come to this down on one knee, ring sparkling in bliss sweating,heart dancing, eyes blink, in an exotic glow she accepts the gift, I'm losing control Chastity Why'd you pick me. I can see A bachelors party entrapped in a bar never wore a tuxedo in a bar before the population raise their glass to the sky say "heres to you a really great guy" But I wonder And that night we be in a lustfully lit room Brittle, we enter the tomb Theres something in the air a betrayal to remember they say a lovers first night lasts forever chastity why'd you pick me and I can see a blood soaked blade in my hand and you dying, buried on the floor screaming unbearably, forever without control but you will forever be ignored and I can see myself miles away in a secret affair and in a shallow grave, you will never be aware They say that a lovers first night lasts forever but after that it doesn't amount to much. chastity you picked me So I will continue to climb alone |
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