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Desperation.
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Desperation. |
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xTr3m3sT Member
since 2008-03-03
Posts 415 |
The shadows of yesterday's pain forshadows today's suffering wondering when the dark cloud of misery will stop thundering trying my hardest to survive in this cold world this phoney life made my damn head unfurl I'm a player of this game I ain't sweating anything while this something in my void is always bothering the thinking patterns of my mind while I write trying to fight these awful thoughts of murder and fright enlighten me, get me out of this place embrace me, take me in your arms so I can retrace my love for other people cause' I have nothing left walking through the never ending cleft while my hands are deft trying to avoid theft, I'm tired of this world filled with crime the chimes play at my funeral while I'm drowned in time my body sublimes, and I reform to my natural state this great pain is reforming in my chest cavity, a straight line right through my heart I should have known at the start that I will end up in deep depression I just have one more confession my profession in life, is murder. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Aside from all that you are saying - which I don't know how to respond to or if I could even if I did know how .. Aside from all that - you write this style really well. You use your words with power. This is the type of writing that I am supposed to be doing in the Poetry Workshop. We are working on "Consonance" - Check this out, okay? /pip/Forum22/HTML/000924.html Alison |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thanks for sharing yann |
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xTr3m3sT Member
since 2008-03-03
Posts 415 |
yw yann :] |
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