Open Poetry #42 |
due to raising eyes |
2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Dans le ciel il y a des oiseaux qui cherchent la direction de ton coeur ou celle de l'Egypte, des papillons impatients comme des alizés qui jouent, il y a des nuages tricotés par le temps, Les oiseaux mangent les papillons, les nuages mangent les oiseaux, le ciel mange les nuages, A force de lever les yeux vers cet ordre naturel, j'aperçois le soleil généreux, le ciel bleu de tes mains. In the sky there are birds which look for the direction of your heart or for that of Egypt, butterflies impatient as trade winds which play with hats and colored dresses, there are clouds knit by weather, birds eat the butterflies, clouds eat birds, the sky eats clouds, Due to raising eyes towards this natural order, I perceive the shining sun, the blue sky of your hands. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
C'est bien vrai - l'Ordre de la Nature est très difficile à comprendre. Mais, comme tu dis (je crois), le bon Dieu est bien plus intelligent que nous tous - et il sait ce qu'il fait! Ta poème m'a donné beaucoup de plaisir. - Owl |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
C'est tres bien, Yann. It gave me pleasure on many levels, one of which is: I understood what you wrote in French, and it's been years since I studied it! It is wonderfully in tune with the natural world. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Yann, I love it in both versions. And I love the idea of seeing the beauty and harmony which flows through all things, even if we can't always grasp the reasons why it is so. Keep watching and sharing. Beautiful! Love, Margherita |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
Interesting ‘write!’… I am especially fond of images such as: That ‘cloud knitting’ weather!; Those ‘impatient’ butterflies; “trade winds … play(ing) with hats and colored dresses”; AND: “la direction de ton Coeur!” [I would describe far too many Americans via Coeur d'Alene...(which, for me, is 'sharp hearted') (just 'hard hearted' wouldn't be quite adequate...)] Applause! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
French truly is a romantic language, n'est-ce pas. Although I enjoyed both versions, je suis partial a la version a la langue francaise. (please pardon my high school French) "Dans le ciel il y a des oiseaux qui cherchent la direction de ton coeur" ~ So beautiful! Linda |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
The imagery in this is simply lovely, and though I understand not a word of French, it just looks good. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Yann............... I wish I could write good french to tell you how beautiful this was!! tres tres bon.... love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Owl, I understand you very well when you write in french, your comments always bring me good feelings. have a nice way |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you James. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Midnitesaun and Margherita for sharing precious thoughts. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Bruce, I'm always thrilled by your comments, they are always close with truth and serenity.... yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello Linda, I didn't understand, je suis partial à la version française, it means I am biased to the french version, there are barriers between languages sometimes, and that is charming, Thanks again for commenting .... warmly yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi steven and Roniece, it was good to hear about you and your nice comments... yann |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
This is a fine poem, yann! Your poetry these days is more and more like a well made wine! Art |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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Ray Sharpe Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 112Tenerife |
Yann...may I call you Yann...that is wonderfull....though i am sorry to say that i do not know how to read french! |
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