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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2008-05-29 05:56 AM



you called it a friend
when your hand was on your shoulder
moving your hair aside
as if it were someone else
and you wanted me to know him

you were not alone with my eyes
or my imagination either
as it bathed in your mystery
like shimmering pale seduction
when the morning was still water

we spoke of calling names then
like handles for lovers to use
when stirring the embers
in secret tender places
you wouldn't say you had one

but you wrote it in the sand
with your playfully poetic toe
then erased it with a foot sweep
when I pulled my eyes from yours
and tried to know you more

there was tender in your reflection
from that backward glance
the over the shoulder observation
of a stranger kneeling in sand
turning granules back to right again

if only for a momentary lifetime

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daark


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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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1 posted 2008-05-29 06:10 AM


but you wrote it in the sand
with your playfully poetic toe
then erased it with a foot sweep
when I pulled my eyes from yours
and tried to know you more


mmmm Mr Daark....I love these lines.. .love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Sunshine
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2 posted 2008-05-29 09:29 AM


there was tender in your reflection
from that backward glance
the over the shoulder observation
of a stranger kneeling in sand
turning granules back to right again

~*~

What visuals in lovely.


Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
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3 posted 2008-05-29 09:46 AM


This is my new favorite of yours.

I like this side of you best.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2008-05-29 05:55 PM


ms r&b, thank you lady friend


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ms sun, thanks ms for being a special pair of eyes

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susieC, thanks babe, glad you enjoyed it

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5 posted 2008-05-30 11:05 AM


I keep reading this and loving this.  It has such tenderness in it and mystery and longing and ... well, it has all that to me anyway (grins).

Thank you, D.

A

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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West Coast
6 posted 2008-05-30 12:53 PM


ms ali-san, see, the oatmeal did it, thanks babe
Margherita
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7 posted 2008-06-01 12:48 PM


Another masterpiece filled with emotion, that slipped me by.

You are a prolific POET and we are so blessed by your gifts.

Love,
Margherita

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