Open Poetry #42 |
Judgement of Heart |
ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
** Please let me know which style you liked. 20 or less forgotten rush overcomed smiling awhile endless folds in loving style holding true judgement of heart an oath .... never to part "or" the unforgettable rush of a simple smile the sudden warmth overcomed tenderizing awhile lost to each moment time, endless in its unfold in loving style completely within its hold a judgement of heart released in its trial never to ache, pull, or part In rhythms to a rise the days shall follow ... each Yesterday, each Tomorrow. - Ct/05 [This message has been edited by ctowen (02-07-2008 10:09 PM).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Oh I liked the first one better. So clear and concise. Joyce |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
one direct , a jolt to the read to spring from her seat |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
I used to be indecisive, now I just can't make my mind up, so I vote for both, |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
CT...Both are great but I like the second one best, it feels like it has more raw feelings of emotion...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
I like the second one. I like the sounds of your words, and the feelings they evoke. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
And behind curtain #2 - 'the unforgettable rush of a simple smile the sudden warmth overcomed tenderizing awhile lost to each moment time, endless in its unfold in loving style completely within its hold a judgement of heart released in its trial never to ache, pull, or part' The winner !!! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
What A wonderful Write! ARCTIC WIND |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
forgotten rush overcomed smiling awhile endless folds in loving style holding true judgement of heart an oath .... never to part'' I like both.....but the first style, is "you" ME~ ~~**~~ |
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graeshine2006 Member
since 2008-06-03
Posts 368The Prairie Lands, USA |
Voting for two because I understood it.... one leaves to much for me to figure out. My guess is that the more poetry one has read, the first write would be pleasing. So check back in a year, and maybe then I'll prefer number one! |
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