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steavenr
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0 posted 2008-05-21 12:08 PM


the pain seizes me and I writhe in anguish
     overwhelmed by the despondency of distress
     my eyes roll back like a ticket torn
to enter the palladium park on a Saturday morn

I take the ticket to the ticketeer and ride
     out in the open—no place to hide
     the wheel is clouded as it rolls into the sky
entering my mind, clockwise so high

the mind plays tricks siphoning off its recall
     as the clouds of confusion come to call
     vagueness stands as a voyeur to missing thought
dreams come as ebbing waves in tides not brought

by reason, by hope, by understanding

© Copyright 2008 Steaven R Snow - All Rights Reserved
r v wooo
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1 posted 2008-05-21 12:23 PM


hummm...pressing situation...must go now but will get back to this one tonite...appears interesting...later...rv
gilead
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2 posted 2008-05-21 01:51 PM


I feel a sense of exasperation and resignation, as if the faculty of reason, and the power of hope and understanding brings nothing to the enigma of unending cycles. Kind of abysmal! But life is many things in the boundless existential experience. I enjoyed the read, and I'm happy to share my personal impressions, even though they may not capture the essence of this fine poem.

Art

steavenr
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3 posted 2008-05-21 02:09 PM


r v wooo, thanks for stopping by and reading

Art, you are wise in your impressions...this is a very personal write with lots of meaning waiting to be deciphered...you have surmised correctly

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2008-05-22 07:08 PM


NIce writing...James
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