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From a Winter Sky |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA 
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I am the Archer against the Milky Way sky, chasing the tail in the aiming eye. My arrow drawn, dare I let it fly, and risk it all—my purpose die? Who from thence would sing of thee, O aimless arrow flung far and free! [This message has been edited by gilead (05-07-2008 09:57 AM).] |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
I think of those stars in formation without an observer for billions of years, until we came along to give them names. Then how brief our lonely hour to sing of them before we die. Art |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Art, The idea is there, however, the construction is odd. Bobby |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
Thanks, Bobby. The poets often think of longevity and impermanence, and it often leads to feelings of loneliness. Art |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Art, this is simply awesome! Love, Margherita  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A cosmic, atrological delight!!!  Love & Star Light, EA  |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
Thank you Margherita, you're so cool, and so kind! Art |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
Thanks so much, Linda. I love the coinage---artological! You have such a way with the language we love---poetry! Art |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
Per your revised comment, Bobby, yes, it is still a little work in progress. I revised it three times before posting. I have been known to revise until there's nothing left that resembles a poem! This is the result of a little note I scribbled in my journal on my Birthday last December. Thanks again, Art |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
Hi, Bobby. I think the lack of punctuation in the prior version added to the awkwardness in the meter of certain lines. I've attempted to improve the poem's readability. Thanks, Art |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
With my knowledge of Astrology, you know I loved this one, Art. "I am the fishes swimming upstream and down, In murky waters or crystal steams I may be found." Ida |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
Hi, Ida. Thanks so much. Your knowledge of astrology is vastly superior to mine. I noticed the poem you included was set in quotation marks. Is it a work in reference to Pisces? If not, please advise! Thanks, Art |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
On the other hand, Ida, perhaps I shouldn't be so lazy, and do a little research! Art |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I just wrote it myself as a thought about the astrological sign. Ida |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
Thanks, Ida, now I can go on in pursuit of laziness! But let me add, I enjoyed the poem!Art |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
ouuuu! I really Enjoyed..  ARCTIC WIND |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
This truly incredible. The way the words flowed together into a seamless thought. enjoyed it greatly sharyn |
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