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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2008-05-03 07:13 PM

I left you  upon the warm sands....knowing that soon you would rise
and the stir that still resided in you would bring a smile, assuring me that
You would not cast me away for I am as much of you as you are of me.

I am  the waters that ripple the fountain of life as a whispering
willow sways and  flows,  arcs softly into itself, casting a lonely
shadow.

I am the gentle rise of life within a warm chest, the flutter of a lid
as sleep caresses the soul,   the quiver of one’s hand as seemingly
haunting demons chase our sleep.   I am all of this and more.

And, upon the solitary, silently shimmering rise of a new moon,
I am content,   for as the waters laugh I sigh....knowing that again
I will leave and again I shall return...leaving you lying upon warm
sands as a chilling wind shudders a reed at water’s edge and I am
forever as much of you as you are me.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2008-05-03 08:02 PM

Nice one!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2008-05-03 08:51 PM

...and therein lies perfect harmony.

This is a very special poem, and I adore the sentiment.

Wonderful writing, Barry~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2008-05-03 11:27 PM

the beautiful imagery here! wow!

takes my breath!

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

4 posted 2008-05-03 11:35 PM

Loved it...especially the first stanza...

j.

shyvl
Senior Member

since 2008-04-11

Posts 531
texas, usa

5 posted 2008-05-04 12:06 PM

What wonderful expressive imagery. Your words flow like a perfect waltz. Pleasure to read
sharyn

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

6 posted 2008-05-04 02:15 AM

When poetry should be poetic, this one could set the standard -- nicely written -- reads well

poddarku
Senior Member

since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

7 posted 2008-05-04 02:31 AM

it is very good poetry

clever talks delay friendship!

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

8 posted 2008-05-04 07:53 AM

Barry... how beautiful you write... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

9 posted 2008-05-04 10:11 AM

Quixotically romantic ~ so dreamy! So intimate ~ and so ding dang well-written.

Loved it!

Linda

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

10 posted 2008-05-04 10:23 AM

Beautiful write Indeed

ARCTIC WIND

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

11 posted 2008-05-04 01:08 PM

Barry my dear young friend, it’s been too long. Forgive me for not coming by sooner, I am slowly making my way around the neighborhood, but there are so many new houses, with gracious occupants, that it is taking me longer than I expected. Thank you so much for your kind review, you have always been there with your charming wit, and support, and I appreciate that.

“As much of you, as you are of me”

Yes, so true. We are, who love us, and they, are who love them.

Glad you’re still here Sir Magnus, great poem, as always.

Rich

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

12 posted 2008-05-04 01:34 PM

quote:
I am the gentle rise of life within a warm chest, the flutter of a lid
as sleep caresses the soul

Dear Barry, this is a great write, it holds true beauty and depth of thought.

Love,
Margherita

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