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gilead
Senior Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 1067
nevada, USA

0 posted 2008-04-28 12:14 PM

Feeling low?
This day will pass.

Read a book.
Write a poem.
Cook a meal.
Eat leftovers.
Okay, eat out!

Have a glass of wine.
Give her a call;
Talk sweetly, truly . . .
Read another poem.
Write another poem.

But whatever you do,
don’t sweat tomorrow---
it, too, will pass.

The sun will rise and set,
with or without you.
Revere them, seize them;
hold them in the eye
of the soul while you can.

gilead
Senior Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 1067
nevada, USA

1 posted 2008-04-28 12:20 PM

I wrote this to myself as much as to anyone who might read it and find some meaning there.

Art

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2008-04-28 12:21 PM

Art~
'read a book'
'write a poem'
'EAT OUT' ... now we're talking~

I love it when someone else has to do the dishes !!

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - [email protected]

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

3 posted 2008-04-28 12:26 PM

Atr,

There is valuable information in this poem.

I'd break it up into strophes, and drop the caps starting each line.

Bobby

shyvl
Senior Member

since 2008-04-11

Posts 531
texas, usa

4 posted 2008-04-28 12:46 PM

Wonderful Lessons!!! I will hold these lines in my heart-"Revere them, seize them
In the eye of the soul," Thank you for sharing
sharyn

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

5 posted 2008-04-28 12:59 PM

good advice in good form

liked the ending:

"While you can." ...even better advice

gilead
Senior Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 1067
nevada, USA

6 posted 2008-04-28 02:02 PM

Thanks for the suggestions, Bobby; I'll revise and see what happens.

Art

gilead
Senior Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 1067
nevada, USA

7 posted 2008-04-28 02:05 PM

Thanks for the suggestions, Bobby; I'll revise and see what happens.

Oops! didn't know I had already submitted. Perhaps an omniscient administrator will notice and whack this one for me!

Art

gilead
Senior Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 1067
nevada, USA

8 posted 2008-04-28 03:27 PM

Thanks, Marge, for your lighthearted remarks. You seem to always know what's in order for the given moment!

Art

gilead
Senior Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 1067
nevada, USA

9 posted 2008-04-28 03:31 PM

And thank you, steavenr, and sharyn. Each time a fellow poet takes time to offer observations and encouragement, I am inspired to work harder to improve my fledgling craft!

Best wishes,

Art

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