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secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

0 posted 2008-04-23 09:25 PM

     Renaissance of Spring

The cinnabar sun sets
over luminous jade forests,
and bows to a fine-alabaster
   moon rising
in its grand-evening song…
that has shaken the
mountains and seas,
(across an infinite space
and ‘deep-time’ void)
long before any grateful ‘traveler’
could tarry...and gaze in wonder,
whenever Spring reenters this
   world,
veiled in her lovely celestial
   mists,
warm, fragrant winds,
and gentle, healing rains.

        ---b. e. adams (4/23/08)

                    ~

shyvl
Senior Member

since 2008-04-11

Posts 531
texas, usa

1 posted 2008-04-23 09:34 PM

your descriptive turn of phrase is aweing. Thanks for the pleasure of reading
sharyn

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

2 posted 2008-04-23 09:40 PM

SecondHandDreamPoet-
I had to giggle after reading your critiques message. Your poetry is very delightful to read. You know in the Starry Night painting how all the color just blending and twirl and waltz together, thats how this poem visualized to me, the colors danced off of the page and danced their way around me. This piece truly is a work of art. Great job with it.

-Kellie

Larrysmom
Senior Member

since 2008-04-03

Posts 533
Florida, USA

3 posted 2008-04-23 09:53 PM

Mr. B, again your poetry blows me away… Absolutely beautiful.

Tammy<333

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

4 posted 2008-04-23 10:19 PM

I have never read a better "spring poem"
and I have read many poems about spring. This one is different and I think I agree with Kellie's lovely, poetic comment.
Ida

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2008-04-24 07:38 AM

!Exquisite! Your fine imagery gifts the reader with visual and aromatherapy, ie...the essence of a fragrant healing Spring shower.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

6 posted 2008-04-24 08:15 AM

Bruce~
From your 'cinnabar sun' to that 'alabaster moon' .... you set my thoughts to *sighing*~

Love it~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

7 posted 2008-04-24 05:40 PM

Secondhanddreampoet,

I like your cinnabar, jade and alabaster. That's a good simile.

Bobby

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

8 posted 2008-04-24 05:44 PM

Just Wonderful!

ARCTIC WIND

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

9 posted 2008-04-24 08:25 PM

loved the pallette upon which you painted this masterpiece, along with the charismatic flow of the words themselves--specially liked the following:
"long before any grateful ‘traveler’
could tarry...and gaze in wonder"

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