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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
The sun came up as it had every other day before rage rose through my throat, tightening not in time, a scream as ancient as the pain it sought to relieve raced a torrent of broken tears and halting cries toward flight birds sang as they had every other day before the injustice of normalcy when nothing, nothing would ever be just, again rolled over me I felt air, weak air move slowly through my lips whispering it’s lame escape, no grief released only energy spent and I, crumpled under burden of a world, heavy with emptiness, watched night fall to black as it had every other day before (for Myrtle) |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
where have you been hiding? Or is it just me? either way, nice seeing you...nice peom. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Oh dear Dunc, there is such a huge lump in my throat after reading these words! As good as it is to read you again, this...is painful. You have expressed empathy for another's absolute sorrow and agony so tenderly.  |
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Seoulair Senior Member
since 2008-03-27
Posts 807Seoul S.Korea |
very touching!!! The emotion was deep. wonderful poem! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
All I can do is nod and *touch the screen* wb lovie  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
This touching poem I understand all too well. Beautifully written. Ida |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Touching screen, m'friend... Myrtle, and others, have passed too soon... you know where I am. For I am where you are.  Thank you for coming home, if only for a dream of a moment. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
welcome back Duncan... your heartfelt words are felt... this is beautiful writing here... love and hugs .. RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
welcome home |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
nice -Juju |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very very touching write, the sorrow and sense of emptiness are deeply felt. Love, Margherita |
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gilead Senior Member
since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067nevada, USA |
The power of words is manifest here in a profound and deeply moving way. Art |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
thank you, for you truly understand me and I do not know how I lived the first half of my life without what you give to me.This grief is so different from what I have experienced before and without your support I would fall apart from the weight of it. one year has passed so quickly.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" ~Unknown~ |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Thank you all for taking the time to read and comment. It is most appreciated, especially given my absence and lack of interaction here of late. In way of explanation, I will offer this... My Mother died last year, after a relatively brief struggle with cancer. A few months later, Susan Caldwell (Myrtle) endured the death of two young friends of her family, who she'd known and watched grow along with her own kids. We have talked, consoled and supported one another through both situations in a variety of ways. I have tried on several occasions to write through what I've experienced since my Mom's death, but with very little success. Then, a few days ago, Myrtle was relating her own difficulty dealing with the upcoming anniversary of Matt and Chelsea's murder and she asked me to try and write something for her. I won't say it turned out to be my best effort, but I was, at least I think I was, able to capture the absolute emptiness loss brings, in contrast to the face of a world oblivious by the cycle of it's own routine, to pain as old as life itself. And by doing so, by finding the words to express Susan's grief, I believe I found a breath of my own. So, thank you also, Myrtle, my dearest friend...  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Still dabbing my eyes over this one. I knew who it was written for the moment I read it. You've always had a way of cutting through to the core, Duncan. Thank you for writing what many of us felt but could not adequately express to Susan. PS, my email changed, follow the Pips link if you have a spare moment. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"the injustice of normalcy when nothing, nothing would ever be just, again rolled over me I felt air, weak air move slowly through my lips whispering it’s lame escape, no grief released only energy spent and I, crumpled under burden of a world, heavy with emptiness, watched night fall to black as it had every other day before" this says so much of the feelings one has when there is a loss... Nice to read you again, Duncan M |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
A very poignant post Duncan My sympathy to you and Susan. Lindsay |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
felt you every step of the way ..... Ct |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Duncan....To share sorrow in this way is a gift that death brings...seems so strange that out of mourning, such love can be born. Hugs! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
hey you. i dig. you have a unique voice that suits loss, enunciates it in such a way that all can not only understand, but feel. missed ya |
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Larrysmom Senior Member
since 2008-04-03
Posts 533Florida, USA |
You have made me cry... I know these feelings. I know them too well, and you have done them more than justice with your pen… Thank you for this… Tammy<333 |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Sorry to be late, I've just now been able to check in. Thank you all for the time and thoughts. Sure wasn't the easiest bit I've ever written... Sorry it made you cry, Tammy, but thanks for understanding. C...I wrote you at the ego addy????? No response, slacker!?!?! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
totally self-serving of me to bring this back up...but I need it today...so I am re-giving it to myself... Dunc"too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
D - that one hasn't been active for a while (see what happens when you ditch out on your friends???  )use [email protected] and I'll give you my non-junk addy. |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Sometimes the sun does the impossible-rising again after such a loss. I sympathize with your loss. sharyn |
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r v wooo Senior Member
since 2007-08-07
Posts 656 |
am new to the forum and am not aware of much of the history of the poetry expressed. the writings and comments,discovered in "loss" have given some awareness and understanding. |
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