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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india 
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empty A gust of wind Carried the empty plastic Down the alley of mind, An alley as dusty as the plastic. The rustic light upon the ground, The emptiness rolled and rolled To the 3rd lamppost to the left, Where it found A stud of gum to stick. An empty plastic A dusty passage Out of focus eyes, lights flickers. How far had you come civilization? No one was there on the porch. A dog barked No body had fed it. An empty plastic Is all, which is alive? Mind tried to find a body To reside. Years and years had passed to gather More years to differ and sever An empty plastic A dusty passage How far had you come civilization? |
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Bobby Jordan Member
since 2007-08-13
Posts 491Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Poddarku, This is fairly good work. in the lines: "How far had you come civilization?" The "had" would sound better to my Yankee ear as "have" Bobby |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A thoughtful write, with multiple answers. Welcome to these blue pages. |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
true. love the read. Tom |
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