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When the Trees Tremble
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When the Trees Tremble |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
When the trees tremble Fall begins to whisper in dusting off kalieoscope leaves dancing upon the wind, swirling down to lay on brittle grass blankets now mottled grey and brown. When the trees tremble we drink hot chocolate, build massive log-laden fires, and pull on last years sweaters, embracing their warmth months before the winter calls. But when the trees tremble they beckon to us all. [This message has been edited by shyvl (04-14-2008 06:15 PM).] |
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NeonKnight Junior Member
since 2008-04-12
Posts 36New South Wales, Australia |
A very good poem, you do create some brilliant images in there for certain. It was a joy to read that one. |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Shyvl, This is a very nice fall poem. Bobby |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Thank you all for reading and sharing. I just started writing again after 2years and was nervous to post. Your comment make me feel more confident. sharyn |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sharyn~ Welcome to PiP~ We are a poet-friendly site and will enjoy reading more of your work~ This is lovely~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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SkaaDee Member
since 2008-04-07
Posts 116Canada |
yes nice poem . love - "kalieoscope leaves" "built massive log-laden fires," I'm pretty sure "built" should be "build" to agree with tense. |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Marge- Thanks for the comments and the welcom. Skadee- you're quite right and thanks for the heads up. This really should have had a few more rewrites. sharyn |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
Very nice. Some beautiful imagery. Take care and Have fun. Steve |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I love all poems about trees and yours is very lovely too! Welcome to Pip! Love, Margherita  |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Thank you steve and Margherita-It is very kind of you to read and share. sharyn |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sharyn, it's easy enough to see why you've received some excellent responses... you write poetry with your heart... beautiful! |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Thank you Sunshine for the lovely complement. I hope I can live up to your words. sharyn |
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Seoulair Senior Member
since 2008-03-27
Posts 807Seoul S.Korea |
beautiful. When the trees tremble, the sorrow was off .In silence, they wait for their tune to speak. Beautiful poem. |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Seoulair- Thank you for the positive comments and for taking the time to share them. sharyn |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I love leaves as they tremble in the fall and during a summer wind storm. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Sharyn a wonderful poem once again...I enjoyed as much the two stanzas and the moving reality of the images.... yann |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Vividly descriptive writing! I thoroughly enjoyed this reading experience!  Big hug to you, EA |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Very descriptive Indeed! ARCTIC WIND |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
drawn in by the title, this is a warm, inviting write...liked the ending best of all |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Thank you all for taking the time to read and write such encouraging comments. I truly appreciate them and you. sharyn |
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Caliban Member
since 2008-04-23
Posts 57 |
A nice remimder of winter memories. Great write Muna seasaimid le ceartas, ní sheasfaidh ceartas linn - Francis Bacon |
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